All Comments on 'My Sister's Friend'

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AngelliccDesireee over 13 years ago

It was okay

It could be a better story...I felt it was a bit rush...Slow down a bit and let the story flow...

JeffLeigh over 13 years ago

I've given you a review

I reviewed your story in the AH at this address: http://forum.literotica.com/showpost.php?p=35102668&postcount=28

I was really excited about this story when I read the description, and I think that you have a plot that could be really great and interesting. However, your execution is lacking and I would really like to see you add more detail and clarity into the sex and add more character building to your story. I think if you took a second look at this and pumped it up with the above suggestions you could really have a 5-worthy story. As is I gave it a 2. I would love to see you continue writing because execution can be worked on and I would really enjoy seeing this plot fully flushed out.

Enjoy the Ride,

Cassandra Gables (AKA JeffLeigh)