by spaldan
This one Is lower rated than chapter one. Perhaps people don't like the story line, but this whole chapter was super hot.
but I understand why some might be disappointed in this part. All external signs point to Savannah's betrayal of her boyfriend and, when his tryst with Kelly & Beth surfaces (and it surely will, one way or another), the same could be said about Ben. And by definition in these things, the protagonists aren't grownups yet. So they aren't sure-footed in making choices about life's priorities. And, surprise, things have ended badly this time. I'm guessing resolution is just around the corner. Nice work, spaldan.
A little bit of a downer story. It was well written but I hope the two make up and things get a bit happier soon.
Life is messy and complicated and it is that part of the story that I find particularly believable. It is somewhat heartrending that these two (Ben and Susannah) have become star-crossed lovers and I am interested in seeing where their relationship heads. Well done and keep going!
At a first read, this chapter might seem a disappointment, with the way things go with Ben and Susannah. The answer to this is that this chapter is merely part of an ongoing saga, and not to be understood as an isolated event. Everything that happens here is part of a carefully conceived plot. Indeed, this whole chapter is plot; the love scenes are part of that plot, serving at all times to advance the story in a marvelously interwoven whole. Seen in that light, this chapter is even better than the previous one. Five stars.
Stupid people risking what they value for nothing, over and over again, each time damaging their relationship more and more. You could not pay me to read the rest.