All Comments on 'My Step Sister and I Ch. 01'

Good premise but too short. Use the words, not asterisks.

Is that it?

Where is the story?

You're writing on a site, where you can actually write dick and pussy, and can get rid of the asterisks.

We’re all adults, we’ve seen the word pussy before, there is not need to cover it. Good start, ready for more though.

Interesting start. The ** are kind of annoying, one expects to actually see the words on literotica instead of some juvenile censorship.

It's pretty ridiculous to use asterisks in 'pussy' on a site like this. What are you, five?

this is a lit porn site dip shit... the word is spelled PUSSY not pu**y.

Are you afraid of using the words Pussy and Dick?

Yeah, this was much to do about nothing. A lot of the other comments centered on the fact that you censored yourself by using asterisks in your profanity. Honestly, I found that kind of cute. But they did have a valid point about it being used on a website that is supposed to be adult only access. If you had demonstrated that it was a plot device of some sort, then I'm certain that you would have been given nicer reviews.

I only gave you one star because you wrote an opening scene and nothing else. Too incomplete and it went absolutely nowhere.

Okay, so I grew up in Texas, but my parents were both from Louisiana. I had wanted to go to LSU. I could have imposed upon any number of Aunts and Uncles (not to mention all 4 grandparents) to use their address for registration purposes and get around the expense for out of State tuition. But by the time I graduated, I was interested in staying in Texas instead.

I mention this because you described the narrator going to TAMU and everyone living in Texas about 2 hours drive from each other. Had I been writing this, I would have placed R&R in Alexandria or Natchitoches and the Narrator in Lufkin or Nacogdoches. It would have made the drive fit the 2 hour mark and also made a lot more sense. I realize that there are a large number of Katrina refugees that remained in Texas and settled here. A lot of them pine for LSU, no doubt. But out of state tuition is a bitch and usually not the best idea no matter what your loyalties are.

A lot of readers commented that this story feels far from complete. I agree wholeheartedly. So while I gave you bonus points for setting it in Texas, I only gave you 4/5 because it needs a lot more work added in. There's definitely more story to be told here. I would love for the narrator to end up with both Renee and Trish as a throuple. Have them spend the day as a date to Messina-Hof in Bryan while he's in College Station. You can do better. This was a good start.

PLEASE do NOT bother with Part 2 OR any other writing for this site. UNBELIEVABLE and I don't mean that in a good way!

Not overly concerned with the spelling police comments, tell us a bit more about your step sister.

Mention what actually seeing her does for/to you.

Give us more reasons to await chapter two, which we are.

Love how of the 8 comments at time of writing, 7 mention how stupid it is to be using asterisks here, and 5 talk about nothing else.

It's OK to write "pussy." Spelling it "pu**y" doesn't fool anybody.

Pu**y. I think that's pronounced Pusterisky. Once you say it out loud, you recognize that i's clearly a term of affection.

Good story. I like it. AAAA++