All Comments on 'Mystery Meat Marriage'

Hi Matt

I enjoyed reading your story. 5 stars.

In the end justice was served. When there is no trust there is no marriage. Just forsaken vows. This tale proves what a man does when betrayed. Excellent

Matt Black is evolving in terms of his story setup. The dubious stew opening led to the jail setting which put the intrigue factor needle into the red zone cc how did a doctor find himself on the wrong side of the prison bars? Crackling good intro !

Alas my expectations for a clever concluding twist were sky high due to MB's previous parachute story. It turned out the twist was there no twist and things turned out exactly as expected. This was a mystery in name only.

Well Matt Black has stepped up his game to being akin to Forrest Gump's proverbial " you never know what you're gonna get " box of choclates. There is hope upon embarking upon one of his tales. I get the sense that this writer is doing his best to entertain the very demanding LW audience.

Regardless of the result, that's much appreciated from my vantage point.

written by a robot.

I have always very much like your writing style and the pace if your stories. This one is no exception. Do you think there is room for a other follow up chapter maybe to take us onto another tangent with this boat load of characters. I find that a lot of you writers never give your stories the opportunity of a second breath or evolution with 'unplanned' follow up chapters. Just a simple mind readers observation

but once again I could not understand the reasonings of the cheating wife. Perhaps it is too difficult even for a skilled writer to put such thoughts into words.

Thank you for sharing.

Completely stale. And you obviously know nothing about the NRA of America. It is not a private club, and did not have "founding" members. You are obviously British. Why do you write about life in America as if you were part of it, or understood it? Americans enjoy a constitutional right to keep and bear arms. Unfortunately, most people in the world are not so blessed.

Making such a mistake about a group a neerdantals. Shoot him!

If our intrepid doctor was truely prificent with a pistol he'd have shot Dr. Wandering Stethascope in the dick or balls. Yeeha Tex.

he was good to walk away his wife was nothing but a WHORE.

her declaration for love was a fucking joke. I would have told her if she loved me to go jump in front of a train.

It is rather incredible to listen to Debrorah's explaination for her affair (which she first said was only once) and the extreme disconnect she had with her husband's feelings and reaction to her 6 month (half a year) affair with a so called friend. Even with aid of the counsellor in trying to get the marriage back on track she is completely lost as to the extent of damage and betrayal she has heaped on her husband. How can she justify to herslef a 1/2 year sexual affair with a man not her husband and spout to the world that she loves her husband ? Of course, Deborah does one person above all else and probably always has, herself. This explains her complete lack of compassion and empathy for both her wronged husband and her fucktoys wife he good friend. Intestesting acorss becomes of her selfish nature she readily shits on husband and friends alike.

I look forward to your future offerings.

It read like an Englishman's story of an American event. It was dry, dull and boring.

Enjoyed it - could have used a bit more editing. e.g. the name of the shrink changed from June to Carla and then Darla. Maybe it's just me, but I pay close attention to names in stories, so little things like this jump out at me.

Thanks for your stories, keep it up!

A rather good story. But watch out for continuity errors though as you did keep changing the name of the marriage councillor: is it June, Clara or Darla?

Well done, a nice story with a interesting hero doing what had to be done and some help from a small town attitude.

thanks for posting

- up to the ending where you seemed to just tire of the story and want it finished.

Well written and coherent, I am just sorry that he did not get on with his life before the end of the story. Have you noted that there is certain lack of cheating stories with revenge or reconciliation of late?

I second (or third) the recommendation for getting an editor -- lots of writing errors in this one. The British attitude towards the US Second Ammendment sounds off loud and clear in this story. It's obvious the author thinks a person licensed to carry a defensive weapon is likely to shoot someone in a fit of rage, sort of like the old, "Wild West" of yesteryear. This was the fear (and prediction) after Florida enacted concealed carry legislation. In fact, the Floride police found "passion" shootings to be extremely uncommon, much rarer in fact than passion shootings by individuals without concealed carry permits!

What many English fail to understand is the true history of this freedom. At the time of the founding of the United States, one needed the British King's permission to be armed (in those days, it usually meant one needed permission to carry a sword). The right to keep and bear arms was the mark of a free Man. Above all else, the Colonies feared imposition of the tyranny of the Monarch on the American people; thus, the inclusion of this important guarantee (among others, like freedom of speech) in the Bill of Rights.

The US Supreme Court has ruled in two landmark cases in the past four years that this is an individual right, akin to the right of self-defense, not simply a guarantee of a State's right to raise a militia. The dumb doctor's portrayal in this story is quite unrealistic -- any educated person in America (and one would presume a doctor is an educated person) knows the described scenario in this story fails to meet criteria for use of a defensive weapon, and even pissed as he was to see his wife screwing Dr. Vic, it is not credible that our "hero" would shoot Dr. "Vic" unless physically attacked by him. Two stars.

Hubby was arrested by the Sheriff, who is the county jailer (among other duties.) In a small community the city police would probably have, at most, a drunk cell. In almost all communities, a shooting suspect would go straight to the Sheriff's jail until trial.

The judge SUSPENDED Hubby's sentence ... he would never have eaten Mystery Meat then looked out at the PRISON towers. Very few jails have yards, thus NO towers! (Likely, however, to have mystery meat!) (and, yes, I did read the disclaimer on the legal details ... not the same, I think!)

Overall, this was an OK revenge story. The target and degree of the punishments will not be sufficient for many readers, but most of those have never been shot (even with a dinky-ass .25!) The story was remarkably NON-erotic. Hubby's eventual conclusion that he should NOT have shot Sweetie's Bull is a good reconsideration.

3*

Fun story....Would have lked some follow-up with the good Dr. The cruise ship angle could have been a lot of fun. Isn't small town justice wonderful. Sometimes, less is very wise.

The heartless wife needed to pay. and hubby was a wimp coward. Hubby should have had at least some harsh words for his CUNT wife, but he was a fembag wimp. it's no wonder she cheated.

But it needed I think more fleshing out...like why did.the wife cheat?She obviously stll loved him,so why?She had the example of the couple who were swingets why eould she do this?And why when Vic had.an open relationship did he cheat?

It also ends too abruptly,it needs more of an ending...does.the protagonist end up with mandy,does he go back to his wife?You could use a further story to do this and tie up lose ends,like why she cheated.

One comment on the writing, can I suggest an editor? You had some problems with names during the marriage counseling and.if you want to write about the us you need someone to translate uk english into american english.

that is not close to what the US supreme court rules in those two cases.

Pay attention you red neck Hick

.."A well regulated militia being necessary to the security of a free state, the right of the people to keep and bear arms shall not be infringed...."

For the first 80 years this country there was essentially no standing army for the United States America. As in the war of 1812.. The Mexican war and 1846-48... And in the civil war... State militias regiments were mobilized into brigades... then into divisions and corps and armies. That was how the country defended itself during the time of military wing crisis or war.

The amendment does NOT say

.."...the right of the people to keep and bear arms shall not be infringed...."

It says

..."A well regulated militia being necessary to the security of a free state, the right of the people to keep and bear arms shall not be infringed..."

The meaning is clear and unambiguous. If you are raising a state militia or you as an individual are dissipating in a state militia ...you have the right to keep and bear arms.

Any other interpretation is bullshit and political grandstanding by redneck idiotic knuckled dragging conservatives

to a Swashbuckler, TK U MLJ LV NV

As a story this was well ...simply terrible. What makes it so is the story background ...where the author goes into some detail over the husband and wife life experiences back in medical school .

They both KNEW of another husband and wife in medical school that engaged in this sort of behavior through their misuse of the SWINGING lifestyle. So there is no possible way the wife could say.... I had no idea my husband would react this way.

As a result of her explanations and her expectations of a six month long love affair with a another man... makes the story unreadable and unbelievable.

I guess you are a fan of the Goon Show!

the world you created is what you created. she was a cheating cunt who never expected to get caught. the husband saved his balls and dumped the cunt. the cheating dr lost his wife. one problem and someone might have mentioned it. a .25mm pistol is HUGE. a 9mm is the size of a .38 caliber. a .45 caliber is a 10 mm [estimates] a .25 mm would be a fucking canon - 2.5 times the size of a 45 calibe. that means hitting him in the balls would have taken everything off from tjhe crotch to the floow and put a holein the wall big enough to toss a cat through. you get a 5.

... a good story. its lacking.......meat.

I liked your story and the emotions were tamed by what I would think was mature after thought. there was a lot of thing left open that I would like to have seen such as how the others in the story went on with the rest of there lives. I hope that this charator could be taken to another chapter or two but if you don't I would still like it.

as for the coment about the .25 mm pistol I think he ment to say .25 cal which is not much larger than a .22 so the whole it would leave would not be much larger than the end of a AAA (triple A) battery and depending on where it hit would go right through. so the skin and come out the other side. I have never even heard of a 25 mm pistol don't think anyone chould hold it to shoot it anyway. LOL 25 mm that would put the bullet to be the size of one inch around. just a misprint that could have been possable fixed by proof reading or editing it .

the lack of emotion of Dr Wally was distracting. I appreciate his steely determination and the nobility of his feelings -- but there's no drama here. Therefore, it just sorta never gives the reader anything to hold on to and inspire us to cheer for him.

I guess I'm sayig that while there's heart in this -- it ain't got no soul.

Take care and have a happy, happy 2013!

First, it's not a .25mm handgun. It's a .25 ACP caliber. There's a pretty big difference.

Second, was the marriage counselor June Brooks? Or Carla? Or Darla? You changed it in three different paragraphs.

Other than those, not a bad read.

A read.

How old were these methusalas?

Some of the plot line may have been realistic and believable, but for him to get off for time spent in jail was a bit of a pinch to believe, especially with all of the crazy laws concerned with firearms, and shootings.

Other than that, I think a man that is trained as a doctor would be calm and calculating towards conflict in his life, as with the divorce.

Thanks for the interesting read.

I guess your story resolved itself, but I couldn't help feeling like it wasn't complete. Something was missing. I felt like something more was a bout to happen, and then it suddenly ended. He had a plan for his life. That rang of something significant. Becoming a ships doctor simply didn't fit the bill. Thanks.

He acted - yep

He did not accept his situation - yep

She paid something - not much so did Vic again not all that much but more than she did.

He is a bit too fatalistic for me - accepting all the crap too little emtion and anger but certainly a real life possibility.

This is what happens when you cheat on a loving spouse. No reconciliation. Cheaters, think twice before you play if you really love your spouse. And, go fuck yourselves.

The marriage counselor's name went from June to Carla to June to Darla to June in the space of several paragraphs. WTF

Does that fuckwit make multiple comments on every story? Where does that no-life find the time, is this his job?

seems very appropriate in this incident. TK U MLJ LV NV

I felt the protagonist was a bit laid back and apathetic. The fact that he chose to stay in prison was a prime indicator of something seriously wrong. No person in their right mind would choose prison over freedom. Especially when one considers that a doctor has significant earning potential. The protagonist was defeated without a war or battle in the context of the story's boundary. Secondly, he represented himself in court even pleading guilty. Please bear with me on this. From my own memory, I recall a saying about representing oneself, "You have a fool for a client". At any rate, a doctor would normally have the wherewithal and means for appropriate representation and this protagonist choose none. Very troubling and frothed with naivety. Then you have the counseling. The counseling sessions were very artificial and somewhat contrived with candy syrup. It didn't fit. A betrayed person wouldn't be able to converse without deep rooted emotion. This story lacked emotion in so many ways. In spite of all this the story had editing problems but was otherwise pretty good. I feel you have skills but you have to show them in a great story.

I think the marriage guidance counsellor had a split personality

Your title does not match the story very well...bill

Still like your writing though....5

Always interesting when a Brit sets a story in the USA. I imagine many prospective readers find this story by searching for the "betral" tag.

Not happily ever after.

Not BTB.

Just...blah!

This story could be called: "The love boat"!!! 2*

but we can still be friends. TK U MLJ LV NV

You should get the caliber right. a .25 caliber is 1/4 of an inch and a 25 mm is an anti armor cannon.

But damned well written.4-Stars.

Once you cheat all trust is gone. Our hero did the right thing. He moved on.

She-it man! He sure was in a bad place! I honestly don't know what I would have done if it was me who caught my wife fucked by my friend?

Sort of puts him between a rock and a hard place !

Thanks for sharing this Fantastic story with us!

Love you all! GREG.

OH 100 % OF READING ENJOYMENT BYE.

"JOKE" This sad sack was sentenced to jail, his first night he heard inmates calling out numbers and they all laughed. Sad sack asked his cellie what gives with the numbers? Cellie (cell mate ) said that they were jokes andd being in jail talking was restricted , so they put numbers to the jokes!! Sad sack asked if he could have a go

Cellie said go for it! So sad sack calls out NUMBER 7 No one laughed? Sad sack asked was that a bad joke? Cellie answered No as a matter of fact that is one of our best jokes! But you know how it is some people can tell jokes some can't!!

Inadequate conclusion!

Oh, how terribly civil! GIVE ME A FUCKING BREAK!

In my state, it is much better to kill the intruder in your marital bed than to merely wound or injure him. Manslaughter will net you a seven year sentence and you could be out in four.

Is right. First get your act together. Jail and prison are not interchangeable words. No one serves more than one year in jail. When sentenced to more than one year you go to prison. Also the civility was nauseating.

You left us hanging. Does the good doctor live happily ever after or does he go back and cut off Vic's cock then send it to his ex-wife Debrah.

You can write an American story but you can't make it believable.

Too many colloquialisms and words that don’t mesh.

We don't go to University.

We don't do maths

We don't have removal vans.

We don't have for hire cars nor shops.

And we don't (nor does anyone) have a .25mm calibre firearm. You're a Brit. How big is 1/25th of a mm.

Now there is .25 inch (roughly 6.6 mm in diameter ) caliber round. And the Walther handgun you mention uses that.

For the rest of the story you simply refer to it as .25. That is acceptable.

Lastly. And I know this will be hard for you to grasp. But just because an American has a gun doesn't mean he has to use it. Which was you justification for the shooting. So trite.

That aside I liked the aggrieved doctor. Manned up and took responsibility for his actions.

Should have put some hurting on his "cunt" of a wife.

Doctors required tomcarry a gun. Absurd. Kepp the wild west stories in the past. Write stories about your experience. Or maybe canada.

Who is Darla?

.25mm is not huge it is 1/4 mm or less than 0.01 inch. Much smaller than a nail gun. It would shoot pins.

Maybe he was trying to pin his balls to the bed.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=w_SiTPtjDLc

Walther TPH .25, and that's not mm, of course!

In the space of a few paragraphs, June became Carla, became Darla and back to June. It is distracting and with the cold, emotionless tone of the story, it really pops out. "Oh look, other men's spooge flowing from my wife's genitalia. Perhaps I should fire a warning shot to suggest he desist? Yes, a shot to the sigmoid colon should do the trick. Then I shall take myself off to jail as I have no other accommodation for the night." Then compare my marriage to meat in a lame attempt to make the title work.

In addition, some research into the differences between US and UK medical training would have smoothed out the transition in the story from Med school to practice. General Surgery is a specialty requiring a multi-year residency. It encompasses many different areas of surgical practice and is definitely not synonymous with minor surgery. e.g. most trauma surgeons are general surgeons.

Finally, though swinging was an important theme of your story, you gave it short shrift in the plot.

I didn't realize I was reading a MattblackUK story until after page 1. I had to stop there. To put it nicely, your stories dont do it for me. So best to stop before getting too invested.

So why did you leave your message?

To prove you are a ...?

Green-something

(a bit of elaboration - if it took a page, then perhaps you are prejudging his output. Personally, it sounded and felt like another author, and perhaps this means we can suss out one of matt's pseudonyms. YMMV, but being rude in the comment section doesn't really put one in a good light. I always feel a bit conflicted when I am, hence this ps. Be nice - remember, sometimes you are wrong in your presumptions)

But its the living that evolves, TK U MLJ LV NV

The marriage counsellor is variously called Carla, June, and Darla.

I won't get into grammar.

Come on!

But I disagree that the doc was a good shot. He missed his intended, or should be intended, shot. He should have got his balls.

"Walther TPH .25mm pistol", that's a pretty big round, just a bit shy of 1 inch in diameter. As Dirty Harry said,"It'll blow your head clean off.", except that no one could hand hold that much firepower!

Or. if it really is only 1/4 of a millimeter, would it even be felt?

Someone is writing a negative because the weapon is too big? And the name changed three times for the counselor? Overall, the story was good. I enjoyed it. Thanks, but again maybe proofread, and research.

I learnt a very valuable lesson. Don't edit late at night!

And be careful with measurements and typing!

The weapon concerned was a German made Walther TPH .25 ACP 6 shot pistol.

.25 is 6.35 mm in metric size.

Won’t belabour the gun thing but could it be possible that this guy (supposedly an accredited doctor) could be so lame as to even tolerate the cheating bitch to come and visit him in jail? Has to have an IQ somewhere in the 50s that he wouldn’t recognize the need to have a lawyer represent him when he is on trial for something that could lock him up for 15 or 20 years! Come on at least make the ‘hero’ somewhat believable!!!

.25mm is aprox 0.01inch, about the size of a pin!

No matter. I've done that myself a few times.

Good story. If he were a better shot, he might have hit the mark and made it memorable. Smart judge. We should all be so lucky.

Again. Good story, but I still wish the doc was a better shot.

"I can see her point, now." - NOW you can see her point? It didn't occur to you before fucking Vic that it might be a good idea to clue your husband in?

Why does the marriage counselor keep switching from June to Carla over and over?

Why did her name keep switching? Because I fucked up by editing the story late at night.

Good story until the end - thought there was more story there.

At first I was hoping that Wally had injured Vic’s testicles when he shot the bastard. But that would have made him guilty of malicious injury, which would have meant a larger prison sentence.

So sad. Sometimes I wonder why I keep coming back.

Tell me what was the real name of the Marriage Counselor, Carla, Darla, or June?

She had had so many aliases it was hard to keep.

I was surprised by the number of errors in the story. You are normally a lot better than this.

Did you even have it edited?

The plot was weak, the storytelling bland, the ending somewhat silly.

Strange, because l know you write better stories than this sad excuse.

Please get back to your strengths in storytelling.

Better luck next time

I can only give you 2/5, there was so much not you in this tale.

So they had three marriage councillors, seems like a bit of overkill.

No real ending

Who was Darla?! MattblackUK, why do all your stories get rushed to an ending. Are you bored with the story by the second/third page??!

Why the rushed ending in most of LW tales? Because most of writers don't know how to write beyond the first part of the story. Once the cliches are done, they ran out of steam.

I have never once in my entire life ever heard a woman proclaim "I cuckolded you" it's ridiculous. The only people who even use it are people who either have the kink, are ashamed and afraid, have the kink and simply don't give a fuck, men who were cheated upon and are now obsessed with cheating to the point they write constant stories about it.

That was good! I doubt any judge would as understanding here, but I think they should be.

rather dumb story

I'm a little surprised at the amount of negativity in the comments. I thought it was a decent effort, if a little improbable in places. The ending was rushed and I was a little disappointed not to hear more from the dippy wife's perspective. I do so enjoy reading the delusional self justifying BS of crazy bitches like her. Still, I gave it 4 stars.

Anon wants Wally to go in with guns 'a blazing. Preferably a GE Mini-Gatling gun. The perfect BTB story for the anons would be like nine words long, with number 1 and 9 being the c-word. Even cave paintings contained a shred of human understanding and self-awareness. Not so this crew of angry spitefuls.

You lose 2 points for an over the waterfall ending which was trite to boot.

Tried to give you 4 stats but it wouldn't do anything. Good story but a bit sad that she threw away a good marriage.

Again..good story with easy potential to be much better.

I would have enjoyed a conversation between the men.

Have the main character say, " Try smirking at me again, good buddy."

Most of your stories don’t have an ending so much as they just stop.

I liked it. I can’t condone shooting the dickhead for screwing his wife, but in the heat of the moment, anything can happen. The judge was reasonable beyond anything I’ve ever heard from a US judge. In the US it is the letter of the law that matters, not justice of any kind.

I have to laugh about the constant finish-the-story pleas, I thought the ending was just fine.

This is one of your better ones. Nicely done

Don’t forgive and don’t be nice. She cheated on you destroying your marriage. Destroy her.

Who is "Carla"? Who is "Darla"?

Unsatisfying to the Nth degree. The whole thing just ends with a sputtering wheeze, and was not in any way enjoyable. If this isn't to entertain, what is the point?

Clear plot, well define characters.

The editing was poor. I expect most readers felt it was as if the author got bored and quit.

Matt, we expect so much more from you.

The Hoary Cleric