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SweetNothingsAndBeyondSweetNothingsAndBeyondover 3 years ago
NICE FIRST TRY!

Well, in the very first attempt you have pulled out a crispy story. Your way of writing reminds me a lot of 'Vaishali's' way of detailing. She too was very well in her story telling techniques. I like her narratives. You too have similar traits in your thought and writing process.

Keep it up Manisha.

My best wishes are there with you...

AnonymousAnonymousover 3 years ago
true story?

I like the way you build it up. Maybe spend a little more detail on your thoughts during the climax. We know what you are thinking until the peak, and then you just leave it out. =(

MagnusBaneRagnorMagnusBaneRagnorover 3 years ago

This was a great attempt but it would be much more amazing if you could make the gullibility more believable, that would really take it up a notch...

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 3 years ago

Interfaith naam rakhta he ruk cyber me complaint karta hu

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25F. I am really conflicted about my feminist persona and the need to be shown her place. Does it make sense? I mean, when it comes down to this area, I just like raw seduction, intellectual flirting/manipulation and a bit of d/s. Needless to say, I'm also natural submissive...