All Comments on 'Natalie's Needs'

Hot!! Need more

Maybe if you had taken a writing class and became able to construct dialogue that's actually readable by humans, this would have been better.

this reads like part of a play - albeit without any stage directions or even basic character description

Forget that loser commenting above. I liked your story very much. Hope you'll write about Natalie dressing up in lingerie. Sheer stockings, garterbelt, heels she keeps on while daddy fucks her and cums on her face. Natalie should talk really dirty. Even more than the quality dirty talk she did in exclaiming how they were fucking. I don't think you need to show who's talking like it's in a script for a play or movie, but still overall a great story. I gave it 5 stars. Keep writing.

What brilliant patience, drawing out every last ounce of passion, almost as if you had been throiugh it yourself.

Nice