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AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
Good story but editing badly needed.

Past tense,

Present tense.

Future tense,

Please learn how to write correctly.

It makes a very good story hard to read.

Writing future tense all the time like a script for a play is a bad habbit.

Think "she sat down" rather than "she sits down"

All in context of course.

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