All Comments on 'Naughty and Nineteen'

Been a bit more real if the word BIG had been left out.

Since you are telling the story as you remembered it, maybe it is understandable that you wanted to fill in all the gaps, but I would have gone for more emotion and less substance. And yes,it was not really necessary to repeat the word BIg quite so often, especially since it did not really play a major part in the deflowering. You do get extra credit for the condom.

It is difficult to write for all generations. It is now harder than earlier since the rate of expanding colloquialisms is greater. I have no idea what you mean by "make out" or by "hang out". I guess your characters don't either, since you imply they don't both mean the same thing by the weird expressions.

I liked the story, but I didn't like that you had sex one twice and didn't get together after that...Hmmmm...I don't know kinda left me hangin

I am just a virgin, but when I read this story I found myself becoming the fictional woman in the story's ending. A sense of fullfilment I am not sure I would have felt otherwise. Never had sex, but I feel the story brought up some sensations I might get when I will actually do it.

Thanks for sharing your experience in writing--

I learned a lot from it :)

the first part of your version was a little lame so to speak but you there was enough variety to keep me reading on. i was totally intrigured twoards the end and the finish was great. i think i finally found one with alot of truth in the end and something that wasnt made up like "we lived happily ever after"

After the first defloration fuck you say you took the condom off, cleaned up then spooned. Then Stacy wanted to ride you & she looked amazing bouncing up & down on you, but no mention of a second condom. So after 20minutes she said she wanted to feel you cum again, and you were happy to oblige. I presume you came into her cunt without a condom on?? So why bother with the a condom the first time?