by LittleHenry
All that buildup and no action. Every Dad has had the opportunity and chickened out.
I like the buildup of these three chapters but I much say I'm almost impatiently awaiting for more physical contact. I know there was a longer gap before this chapter was entered but maybe we could have a multiple page story that involves some more physical engagement?
Hard to believe this story does not have more comments. Nicely written and a good slow build up. I am thinking about the old line that goes something like this. A woman lets a man believe that he is the one doing the chasing and catching.
I imagine a lot of readers are expecting the action to start a lot faster. Normally, I would be. But this is a fantastic piece of work as it is; frankly, so far, it reads like it's worthy of a lot wider audience than just an adult-stories website. Keep up the good work.
I like the build up and setting the scene ...time for some action! Great job keep em coming
I am really enjoying the slow pace and the teasing inevitability at play here. I really can't wait to see what happens next, but I will. Please don't stop.
I kind of like the pace of these one page wonders. We get some character development instead of hot sex, but one of the one pagers will get there. I am in no hurry.
I really like this story. Engaging and its not all about lust. You have given the father depth and morals but still made him engaging and sexy.
Randi isn't vapid and well stacked only but has a brain and exercises it. An old soul in a young body.
I don't want to make assumptions but I so like the way this love story is playing out without the cliches of a horny teenager and amoral father who suddenly want to get horizontal with each other. These are three dimensional characters we are beginning to care about and I say THANKS for a great story.
Now I have one request.. PLEASE DON'T ABANDON IT and leave it unfinished as that is truly frustrating. When I get engaged in the characters, I want to see it all through from buildup to climax to denouement so I can be immersed in their world and emotions and find it satisfying.
Thanks for the great read!
Can't wait to read more about Randi and Mr. D!
I log on every day just to check if the next chapter has been loaded
Seeing as they're only one page each, can you get them out a little faster?
and the posters are still saying
"nice start"
cute only stretches so far.
but that could be because the chapters are not even one full page each.