All Comments on 'Never Been Caught'

You must be as sick as he

to continue.

Your request for input set a high expectation. This was just a bad dream

Perhaps a bit more background on the character Jack Rastle since you called him your hero? Beyond that, not off to a bad start and the sex was very well written.

OK story. Several spelling errors - two words combined into one. Examples, "damnit", "headbutted", "headcase". "cellphone", "bedsheets" all should be two words, not one. Also, people are "who" not "that".

Dis was good - unequivocally good - not without fault but still for a first effort - quite descriptively good.<P>

So nay on youse naysayers - so you have said your nay but you are no Harry from Va. - now are you.<P>

All silliness aside - unless you have more than one brain and 2 eyes a reader / editor is in order - unless you are too proud or haughty - to want to grow and be more appreciated.<P>

You opened more than decently and have promise - lets see how you do with well meant constructive suggestions.<P>

With Regard

A good first submission, thank you. We become better writers by writing so keep at it.

This was a good story. it got my juices going as I read it. I hope you will write more.

KATIE in NJ

Well, I came several times during this story.

Especially at the part with the hamster and the banana. It was a cumfiesta.

Wonderful! im looking forward to more.

This is coming more than a year after the last comment, but I really liked the story, and it made me want to know more about Jack Rastle.

...too bad it looks like the author didn't add any other stories. Oh well...