All Comments on 'Never Have I Ever'

Great read, it made me want to watch. Consider Adrianne eating Lynn while her brother fucks Adrianne. When the other roomate hears the groaning comes to investigate.

To the critic from below "please learn to either properly edit your stories yourself or learn to use a GOOD editor. you stupid errors ruin the flow of the story and keep readers away from the rest of your stories NO ONE WANT TO".

Try sending your complaints about editing to an editor before you post them yourself! First, Capitalize, Capitalize, CAPITALIZE THE FIRST LETTER OF ANY SENTENCE! Idiot. Next, put periods where they belong... like after the word 'stories'! Lastly, when dealing with a singular, you use the plural of the verb... and although 'no one' implies a vast quantity, it is singular in nature. Thus... 'wants' is the correct verbiage. Didn't read the rest of your idiot post, so can't comment on the rest of it, which is better for you, LOL!

To YKN4949... any mistakes were not noticeable enough to detract from the story. Good job and keep writing!

The problem at this sight is those folks that think their all so mighty to tear at someone's talent! Great flow, and real hot of a read! Screw the jerks that have to make a note and just crash your mood to do something else.

Sammy a lucky guy, got his sister and adrienne, though it would be interesting to see who finally gets him.

I would love to hear more about the three of them

i TRULY HOPE THERE IS MORE TO SAMMY'S ADVENTURE.

I'm so fucking ready now--gonna cum hard!

Loved the game idea, but the descriptions were so good I just didn't want it to end!

This is one of my favourite stories on this entire site. Its so nice seeing a male character who is not a arsehole and is just shy and i really like how you establish the brother/sister interaction and how Lynn does care about her brother and wants him to be happier.

Never have i ever enjoyed a story this much

One of the better stories Is there going to be a follow up

A brother's dream!9F3B

Your writing and story is nothing short of Volcanic!!!

One small but important suggestion, get a good spellchecker and grammar checker. That was the only drawback on your story. I DO WANT TO SEE MORE CHAPTERS ADDED TO THIS STORY!!! PLEASE!!!

it is a very good story and the plot can continue for quite some time. The most important thing for any author is to find a good proofreader.

Characters are believable and relatable, enjoyed it a lot.

With that monster cock, the roommates deserve a treat.

You have a real talent, to my mind for coming up with the way out unusual.

Gotta read a lot more of the fruits of your imagination.

What kind of vitamins was this kid taking... what ever it is, he could pay for his college education by selling it to all the "Jocks" on campus. (Or maybe he just had a blood transfusion from "Young Frankenstein"?)

that was a great story, wow, with the right amount of suspense and sex, it was truly a thrilling read

This was a great story from start to finish, but it was riddled with small spelling errors and missing words. Unfortunately, several of these take you out of the moment as you try to deduce what the author had intended to write. If this story was given a quick editing to polish up these problems it would definitely be a 5 out 5.

Older sister incest is so dirty and sexy. Yum

great story

I really did enjoy the story. I agree about the spelling errors and missing words though but everyone makes mistakes now and then. the story didn't just jump straight to sex like most do. I give it 5 stars! Keep up the good work!!!

What spelling, what missed words, I was so into this story I did not notice. Write Write keep on writing. EJ

Great story i really enjoyed it 5 stars from my side

your story was so hot it had me hard and leaking precum the whole time.Awesome job

One of my favorites I have read on here. I liked how there was a lot of build up, and did not just jump to the sibling sex. Had me wet and throbbing the whole time. Keep it up!

i did not stop reading from beginning to end. very exciting and innovative, as well as creative. hope to read more such sexy game actions.

This was really good maybe a story like this with two sisters with the younger getting dominated and also turned into a slut afterwords but also has a cousin who is same age as sister and is taught how to be a Dom

This is my first comment on Literotica in years of enjoying this site. Thank you for this story, its a great mix of hot and raunchy yet also has the innocent emotional connection. Awesome and insanely erotic !

Damn hot juicy sis bro story and also like the way you build up story slowly.You got a great gift writing love story YKN4949..Keep up good work..

great story write more. love this

Very hot, well written. Loved it, thank you!

This is an awesome story. I would love to see it continued from right where it left off at.

Please don't stop with the story here keep it going there could be so much more

So when is the movie coming out and when are the other two girls going to get fucked.

would love to read what happens next between Lynn, Adrienne, Carrie, and Sammy

Excellent story. But there were quite a few errors such as Carrie becoming Claire and missing words. Again, excellent story but please use an editor/proofreader next time

wish I'd had a sister...

so far as proof reading, yes get a 3rd party. But you can catch a lot of errors simply by reading backward. It causes you to focus on every word

Between re-reading this and re-reading 'just the six of us' (even if the brother there is a douche tard, lol) I am soooOo wishing I had a sister or four, or step sisters, or adopted sisters, or being adopted with sisters, or a neighbor with girls who treated me like their brother (..er, naughty bad brother;)

My mom the divorce queen, five husbands, and not one fucking sister. I've been robbed!! ;)

I would love to read more of this

do continue, please!

From now on I'm taking an extra blood pressure pill before reading anymore of your creations.

Wink Wink

SliperyRox

Of BTW.... don't you dare stop

It'll be 39 lashes with a wet noodle if you do!

( you know what comes after the wet noodle.....)

Can't stop thinking about this story, you have to continue it

Very naughty and nasty, please get a nasty foursome going on with them and the rest of the floor "ladies" of the dorm.

First of all I LOVED THIS STORY and the way it was written. I am not usually the one to point out people's word or spelling errors. I think it would be great if you re-read it or have somebody correct it for you. In the beginning of the story when talking about THE DUDE you said 'I think that <b>SHE</b> came out of the womb with a certain social awkwardness'. There are other places in your story that also needs correcting.

well written very descriptive extremely sexual. got my dick as hard as sammys. you have to tell what he did to adrienne

love it.looking 4sum

The only thing missing is he didn't eat your pussy. I would have done that first thing maybe he will eat Adrienne's

Love the way you write contemporary and vibrant conversation as opposed to dull dialogue.

This story really wowwed me. It definitely had good character development. I liked the fact it was not just a quick sex story with little in the way of plot.

great story I love the bond that you and him had and I would really enjoy to know what all exactly happened with the three way at the end with your roommate you and your brother

I also loved the sequel. I hope there'll be more chapters!

I loved the concept, and loved the flow of the story. You just need to either proofread it yourself, or get an independent set of eyes to clean it up. There are many spots where it should have been "she" instead of "her" and the like. If I recall, the very first paragraph or two had a "she" instead of what was obviously supposed to be a "he." Again, much respect for the concept.. Just clean up the details and it will be fantastic.

Great story. A few mistakes here and there but i havent seen a story yet that didnt. 5 Stars and looking forward to reading the sequeal

Once I found out your male lead was five foot, three inches I didn't want to read any more. Sorry, but it is a turn off. Short guys or girls. Can't help it.

why do stories always start out with a terminally shy, short, underdeveloped, immature, and inexperienced nerd, but within a few paragraphs he is super stud, giving multiple orgasms to multiple partners, while maintaining an almost permanent erection?

Do you have a first grader for an editor? OR are you just pure STUPID??? it's a very nice story, but I did have a good time laughing my ASS OFF at your below silly mistakes. HA!

A lot of folk seem to be bitching about the technical quality of your story...piss on them.

they offer up bad remarks about spelling and all that shit but do they ever offer to help

OMG that would be work and then they could not poke fun at others.

A little trick I learned form a Proofreader for the NYTimes. Read it backward, this forces you to look at the word in a different context than what you wrote. This will also help you spot other errors. The mind is a real pain when it comes to proofing your own stuff - it is like it says I just wrote that and I know it is correct.

One of my favorites is the number tree---now I can figure out three, but just how many is tree and what kind of tree--- one of my worst problems is 'that'. I can guarantee if I am in a hurry it will come out taht I finally had to set my dictionary to do an auto correct. Going back to correct this really messes with a train of thought.

Now from the story good start but junior went to wallflower nerd to super stud a little quickly for me. The rationale I can see is his love for Sis. I would have liked to have seen this revelation dragged out a bit more. But it is your story so what the hell and keep on writing please

I just reread what I said and sure enuf my fingers get from and form mixed up all the time

Your character motivations and plot are unique and believable. The story is so good that the few typos are hardly noticeable.

This was one of the best I have ever read. Screw the comments about editing. I fix those as I go and never let it take away from the story. You did a Wonderful job. Please, more to come.

This was simply outstanding....was aroused within minutes, and never relaxed....now got to go and find my co-worker with benefits, or I'll never make it through the rest of the day.....

I usually start reading many stories before finding one good enough to finish. I finished this one. I'm sure anyone can criticize it for lack of editing, but those mistakes didn't distract from the flow of the story.

Nicely done!

Never Have I Ever chapter 1 is very good. I enjoyed it very much. Very Good!

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A truly honestly Awesome story. I nearly had a similar experience so I can totally imagine this situation taking place. I just wish my experience had involved three girls but unfortunately it was only me and one girl cousin of mine and even I had to leave the day after next. I can just imagine where this might go if Adrienne gets involved since she said this isn't over. It seems as though she wants to join in the fun and get her juices flowing as well. I would love to read more.

Perhaps Adrienne and Lynn will bring Carol onto the brother and introduce her to his pleasure. Then anything could happen.?

I'm always a sucker for romantic siblings who make love. Five stars. Thanks for an enjoyable, sexy read.

Either you released this story as a first draft or you need a competent editor. Your story suffers from attention to basic grammar, i.e., bad spelling, poor word usage. omitted words, use of popular while demonstrating a lack of familiarity with how to properly express their meaning, impossible descriptions of action, trite meaningless statements. confusing descriptions that totally obscure your meaning, like:

taking your care to Habitat (car)

who care (cares)

wide as saucer's (saucers)

I could care less (couldn’t)

for thirty second (seconds)

Adrienne (in) Sammy's baggy

my other breasts (breast) (YOU ONLY HAVE TWO!!!!)

ever hand into me (had)

Then I started sliding so his entire dick, except for the tip, (-stayed inside of) (was outside) my body (IT IS IMPOSSIBLE TO HAVE ALL OF HIS DICK INSIDE HER EXCEPT HIS TIP. THAT WOULD ONLY POSSIBLE IF IT WAS INSERTED BALLS FIRST!!!!)

I grabbed his (hands) and placed them

tightening of tension (WTF????)

pleasurable shocks of lighting (WTF II ????) (lightning????)

I slide my fingers (slid)

brother cum (brother’s)

A five star story with three star mechanics results in a four star rating.

Great story and needs a powerful ending get writing again finish your job!!

Oscar material LOL 😘

I wish this story finishes with a foursome. It would be so good if two friends fuck the brother while sister was crying in her room and later join them to fuck her baby brother.

A fun, exciting, erotic read. Continue.

If you need help for grammatical errors, be I glad to same do.

Damn, that was hot

That was very hot

Please write more on this story line.

We need more of this a foursome would be a nice start.

we need to have this one finished more more

Great story u just need to go back and redhead it and fix the grammatical errors and where u say like him dick instead of his

I'd suggest continuing the story where it left off, instead of time jumping because that happens to often. You would loose interest in the characters that you have already created.

What else are brothers' suppose to do for a 'close-family'member - especially a sistr. You get five Large Gold stars for this well defined story.

You have serious talent!!!! An extremely erotic story, the sexual tension in my own bedroom while reading this was as heavy as it was in the dorm room. I'm pretty certain that my 37 year old cock was as hard and leaking as much precum as Sammy's. How can anyone rate this less than five stars?

Please continue the story, but poor Sammy needs a break. A fourth time with Adrienne straight away is simply unrealistic and would break the magic. In a way, that's already happened when she entered the room. A better follow on would have been Sammy staying for a second night and Adrienne hinting that she overheard everything during breakfast ;)

xx

Id like to see where this is going

I’ve been reading your stories for years off and on now and I finally got around to making an account and writing a comment. Love what you do, you’re very talented to be able to write on so many different genres. I love the story build up on lots of these (Actual Sorority Sisters was great, I read all 4 parts). Keep doing what you do <3

I really enjoyed the build up.

I loved this because you know what is going to happen but you can't read fast enough to get there. This begs for a sequel with the roomies.

Like where this seems headed so please continue the story!

Clicking on the Similar Stories links sometimes pays dividends.

Nice build up, nice characters, let's see what Ch2 holds in store.

Great read and hoooot.... Both believable/ realistic and inspirational! Don't have siblings myself and believe in the confines of the law, but l enjoyed being taken for a walk down a taboo lane.

lt is also refreshing to read other than hurting people dreaming of hurting others... Thank you!

They helped get this far, they ought to reap some of the benefits...

I loved it. Hot as hell.

This is an amazing story and I wished that I didn’t end, this was so hot and I wished that it could go on for forever. Part 2 with roommates would be great and loved. Keep up the great work.

wow that's a hell of a story do please make chapter 2

Great beginning to the story excellent story teller you are!

Great writing but it needs a Chapter 2 ..Please

I am embarking on a great undertaking. I'm creating my own Literatica universe in which my stories will all be interwoven together... I am taking a couple original stories of my own and re-imagining of some stories from my favorite authors. I am 'stealing' plots basically, but I will be given credit where it is due. I don't believe in taking credit for others work. I will use the basic concept but take away what I don't like add what I think will make it better (too me) longer more, envovled and so on. This is one of yours I'm doing my own version of at some point. love your work I will most likely use other story ideas of yours THANK YOU.

Please, Please write chapter2

it was a great read and did not go where I was used to it going and I did enjoy it very much.

So Pretty please write Chapter 2

In 3 pages you told a very cool story. One of my favourites here. There was nothing I didn't like in it!

I think that you are a fantastic writer. Knowing how you think by your story makes me wish very much that i could meet you, really.

Big Job Backyard Barbeque Bob

You badly need a good proofreader. A couple of incidental errors are acceptable but you have more than a couple and one impossible situation.

This is one of the best storiies I have read on here. There was only on thing that I find terribly wrong and that is..... you did a great job leaving it open for the next chapter, but the problem is that I have been unable to find the next chapter. Thanks for sharing!

Please continue this story. This kid is going to be the talk of the school. Getting more pussy than most guys there. .

This could go on and on. They live together off campus

One of the few stories on here where the sister isn't a real bitch to her nerdy brother. Great story... Kudos.