All Comments on 'New Girl on Campus'

the only thing i would change is you need to use other words for orgasm at times. Overall well done

Meh, needed more build up and I’d say to start using some contractions more when quoting the characters ex) “you’re” instead of “you are”

Instead of “It must be” use “it’s gotta”

Try to think of how people actually talk in real life instead of an English text book. Just some pointers… you got promise.

I find some of the best portions of stories here are the buildups to the encounter.

You write really well. Thanks for a great story. I thought the buildup was great; we knew where it was going and it got there at a good pace It could use a sequel (or at least I could!).