All Comments on 'New Jersey'

Good Morning NJ

It seems that there was a beginning that we should know of. How did she arrive at this point.

The ending left us with submission of the female on the table. Which is okay because we can all imagine what MAY have happened next.

The writing was good but, you need more content.

how did they come to that situation? but i like the story

I disagree with the other two comments - this is a slice of experience that is best savored out-of-context, best enjoyed independent of history. It really doesn't matter how they got to this - just that they are here, although to be left hanging at the precipice of my silken wetly glistening heat was damned unnerving...

Erin

I too disagree with the negatives. The story needs no preamble. It's sexy, good tension, and gets the juices flowing. Just what a good short story should do. Perhaps the other commentards have no imagination...

More, please.

Whoo - that was hot!

That was great I love the way it leaves you hanging at the end. Great work.😃

My mouth was dry and my body simply tingled! But having said that, I should love to see a sequel! Loved it!

Is there something about the title we should be figuring out?

You're really good at extending detail, pace, development -- as I've commented (anonymously) on your other 2 submissions. I see you exercising mature, literate craft with the kind of elegant control you give to some of your characters.

Clever, spare and erotic writing---most enjoyable. Nothing more needed, nothing more to be said.

I love this; your description of this massage/seduction and the slowly building passion drew me in and excited me. I was wondering... what music would be playing while your fingers and hands worked their magic? Maybe Bolero?

Scorching.