by LexxRuthless
I enjoyed reading this and hope that there is going to be more in the future.
Yes you do need to do multiple chapters with these three energetic sexy people.
I loved all the sexual tension that was building up before that Brunch. Please add more chapters.
5 stars from me. Hot Hot read !!!!!
Solidly enjoyable and entertaining read, though it ends too soon. I like the characters and situation, the writing is well above-par and the dialogue enjoyable- but it's desperately lacking in 'climax,' and that should have been handled this chapter for a proper story.
Still, great fun! Thank you for sharing it with us.
This is a well-written tale.
If there could be one thing improved it would have been Chris stepping forward with an extended hand an an apology for the first round, but then some boys never grow up. Of course, a six pack would have helped as well--beer, I mean!
Don't over-do it in the next chapters, or you'll have these three moving into his new house. That's cliché.
I enjoyed the characters, the situations, and the humour.
Please extend this enjoyment with future chapters.
5/5
I'D LOVE TO GIVE YOU 10 STARS, HELL, WHY NOT MORE? I LOVED HOW YOU WORKED MY BROTHERS IN ARMS IN YOUR STORY. JUST LOVED IT. DAMN I SURE HOPE THIS IS JUST A FIRST PART OF A BIGGER AND BETTER STORY! THANX BRO AND BY THE WAY, JUST LOVED YOUR LAST SERIES, "SPINAL MENINGITIS IS NO JOKE" SUPERB! THANX FOR THAT ONE TOO!
Beautiful start, great dynamics between the characters and an altogether very fun ride.
We're gonna need at least another two dozen chapters or so.
Looking forward to a second set of chapters. Very sexy story and a great read
Okay, now you have GOT to keep going with this one. Please? Pretty please? I'm like, seriously begging you to continue this story.
Glad I am not him having to cope with the new version of windows!
Now the three go looking for a house with the insurance money. The girls tease the hell out of Tom as they view the houses.
Tom buys a secluded three bedroom house with a pool and hot tub in the back within commuting distance of college and work. They fuck like bunnies in every room, including the sauna and "play" room in the basement. Two of the bedrooms just gather dust....
Oh, the squeals of delight.
Gotta tell you Tex, I like your style. You should take up writing. Seriously, This is good. I really look forward to reading more of your work.
Thank you! Great beginning. I hope you continue these characters. Maybe like in the twilight series motif.. Selfdoubt and realizations with the girl's past's? Im sure the ladies would gain from having a older guys perspective on many things in life.
This is awesome. This is one of the hottest stories I ever read, even though it’s got the least amount of ‘action’. Great writing!
I really hope you continue this story. Love all your stories but the josh stories and this one are top notch. Looking forward to see what these 3 get into.
This would be awesome if you continued it, maybe 12 more chapters or longer stories.
Don't leave us hanging, more please. You are a good wordsmith, keep up the good work.
What can i say but wow!! Best story ive read by far in a long time. Im just as horny as tom and to be honest a little sad there isnt more.
You have to keep going! This is gold!
This is the best story I’ve read from you so far, and I’ve read several. There is room for a sequel, but the problem with that is, what would be the problem? Right now, you’ve got a perfect, muscular, brave, hunky guy with two, perfect, sexy, nubile, eager girls. Nobody is lying. Everybody is open, honest, and happy. Where is the tension and conflict that a Chapter 2 or more needs? I’m sure you’ll think of something.
Another 5-star submission.
Story is perfect as is.
If you want to do a follow-up, try really hard not to screwup the characters.
It would be painful to mess them up. If you do need conflict, think of an external source.
Ex-boyfriend, ex-wife, something like that.
dezurtdawg here, still can't remember my author password and help desk sucks!
Lexx my man, you have truly spun a marvelous yarn here! My greedy mind screamed that it needed a "4" because you left us hanging. But my author's soul forced my finger to hit the "5" this truly deserves!
Of course, like the others have said, you really should come up with another chapter or two for us to enjoy! Well done sir!
Thanks for the post.
dezurtdawg
You know you were off to a great start here and you have the makings of a great series here.
I'd really love for you to revisit this story...
Please tell me there is more to come!! Great writing and love the story!! Would love to read more about these three.
A fantastic story, it did not need sex to be so good, just anticipation.
Well done!!
Great story and build up but don’t leave us hanging. Where is part 2?
A good story well told deserves the 5 stars I gave you, but I have to agree it feels a little unfinished. If there's more to come, great, if not, I kinda wish you let him put the blocks to both girls a time or two before you wrapped things up.
Do you think a serious romance is in the picture for him and one if the girls, or both of them? Seems like they could do many things outside the bedroom with him simply coming across as a new resident of California and the girls just asking him to go with them. He could simply say hello to their friends and converse with them about what they are doing (and what he wants to do in his new location( and be accepted.
Great story. I think that it definitely needs a sequel.
Definitely earns a 5 star from me
I agree with the others leaving comments. I did enjoy the story. Well written and fun. But it needs to continue. There has to be a second chapter at least. You built a good relationship with both girls and then it came to a screeching halt. Please continue it!
What did I think of this story? Brilliant is what I think I love the interaction of the three roomies their playfulness is perfect . Really hoping you write a chapter 2 3 4....
I agree this was a very well written story, but I disagree with the rest of the commenters that there should be a Ch. 2.
Let our imaginations run amuck with the many sexy erotic endings we can think of.
IMHO, most writers fail to match the level of their first chapter, not even close.
Great job. Definitely needs more chapters. Maybe throw in a couple pregnancy
Five stars and a favorite point! I agree with the other commenters that it needs a second chapter. It was a great build up but you stopped writing just as the sex started!!
pretty good situation, lucky older man. really? 4 young guys struggle to carry a couch that just 1 guy carried?
Wonderful written story. Spiced up the mint for an abrupt end. Mind is on full throttle to think what happened next, next n next. Awesome story.