All Comments on 'Niece Saturday Afternoon Plus More'

enjoyed your story, sensual buildup, got me wet, was rubbing myself, can't wait to see what u did next.

Not much actual fucking, good stoy & detail. giving a five, keep going, write the next part

I read the first 13 paragraphs and decided it was time to move on. Good story telling is about organizing your main points. You zig zagged thru starting the story and then circled back to offering more descriptions of people. I gave up at that point. Sorry, mate. Better luck next time.