All Comments on 'Nigel's Story Ch. 01'

Well my my....the vibe got a good workout after reading this......well done *S*

This has an interesting voyeuristic feel to it that sets it apart from the typical story. I enjoyed seeing the scenes from this point of view. Nice work!

Definitely makes this story stand out.

After reading your comment on my story I wanted to check yours out. Very hot, and well written.

There are a few points that need to be smoothed out but the story is basically a good one. One thing I really noticed was the weather. In one sentence you say it was very cold. Then, a little further (it read like just days) the roomies were having a cook-out and drinking on the patio. There was instant BDSM "play" for people who considered themselves not seriously in a relationship. Basically if I condensed the story into one word per sentence it would be "fuck, fuck, fuck, fuck, etc." There was no emotions or feelings for each other. They all seemed very shallow for all the fucking going on. Nigel was more on the sidelines than involved. The safe word wasn't safe. No one listened for it or to it until everything was already finished, that's a huge deal breaker.

Always fun being tied up.

Anna