by MzSweetCandy
I think this would make a great porn-horror movie. Imagine the computer graphics possibilities!
MzSweetCandy, This story is impressive for a first effort. Orgasms galore :).
You made me cum so hard baby.
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Scotsman69
Hope they will make you cum too.
That is like the wow loved it. can't wait to know what happends to the charmed ones keep going.
I noticed that your story was reviewed on the story discussion board. The three reviwers were all pretty unkind with what they had to say but I can tell you that they are 3 old witches. However your story is only action with names there is no character development at all. Also the three witches have a point about punctuation,it's not too good. I suggest that next time you ask one of the voluntary editors to give your work a once over before you submit it. Don't be discouraged by the three witches your story was better than most first timers. Good luck for the next one.
Definitely the strangest story I have read. I actually laughed out loud at one point (that is not necesarily a bad thing) It did become a little like a giant run on sentence that never really got anywhere. But it had its moments. Glad to know that Zombies aren't only interested in brains.....
Except for the last 224 words, the misspelling of Geller and capitalisation of grandmother, this is word for word the same as a story with the same title by Omega Phallic put up on the t-s-s-a site in 2004. Shame on whoever did it.