All Comments on 'Night of the Were-Bimbo'

I would love to see where this goes if more chapters were added!

Start of a series? Vielli and Howard were commented on, but then the change to Suzie-Susan began. Wondering if Reynolds, Liam, and Laurie are now infected. Can males get this? Unless contained soon, this will spread fast. With most forms of lycanthropy, it's transmitted through a bite. A contagion passed by any fluid exchange? Oh boy. And is she contagious all the time or only during the effects of a full moon? Will the convert ops researchers visit next?

Begs for a follow-up.

Enjoyed. 5*

Other-wise, beware , this'll be where the Were-bimbo wears thin.

You should move this to Sci Fi/Fan, it would be more appropriate for the story, and will be well recived there. Give it a quick re-write, and post it as a new story, and see how it does, compared to what it has done, in EC.

My guess is, it will be a hit, and there will a big interest in follow-up chapters. It has potential, and you have the chops as a writer; good technical writing skill, great voice for the subject and a decent story arc.

If you do a re-write, repost, I'd suggest making the roommate a bit less accepting; not of getting together with Susan/Suzie, as you covered that with the 'three freebies', instead, don't have her call her Suzie, or completely accept the physical/attitudinal transformation. That didn't ring true for human behavior; remember, she's a med student, so she's going to be analytical.

I strongly encourage you to consider re-working this a bit, re-submitting it in Sci Fi, and outline a longer story arc. It's just screaming to be done.

Good luck, and I'll keep my eyes open for it.

GeoD

Hmmm… not up to your usual standards.

Funny, Kawaii, und Romantique!

Love this passage:

Or you can just play one of Gaffigan's comedy specials. It's practically the same thing."

"Hot pockets!" Laurie sang in a high, winsome falsetto.

11/10 Hot Pockets!!!!!

What a sweet story! I wish there were more stories with this sort of transformation that were this sweet rather than always being humiliating and degrading.