All Comments on 'Night Visits Ch. 01'

A little too short but hot nonetheless. Can’t wait for the next chapter.

I would call her cute, not hot but cute, maybe the next chapter

Would have preferred more ACTION,

Many guys jo with mom's panties. The intoxicating odor often leads to a desire for more. Kyle has gotten to the point of more risky actions. Usually son just peeps uncovering mom and later masturbates.

You need to tell a much more detailed and involving story within each chapter. Expand characterization, insert details like what dad is doing or what mom thinks about dad as son performs. Who is the son? Why is he doing what he does? Go beyond a single scene to a full first chapter.

Nice start, can't wait to read ch 2.

You. Ed todo some research before you write.

Almost 20 years ago a prostatectomy didn’t result in not being able to have an erection.

True, you can’t ejaculate, but with a wife that wouldn’t let you come in her mouth, that was a blessing.

No problems sucking through a climax.

And even years before that there were implants to allow sex.

Bill S.

Is the father deaf? Do they sleep in separate rooms?

Nice fantasy anyway