All Comments on 'Nikki's Struggle'

Very well written. But this and the other Sex Mage story are freaken terrifieing, I'd honestly put them under Erotic Horror.

I really like this story and the premise. It's really neat and a lot of fun to read.

I hope you write more like this. I read the other sex mage story, and it's fun too, but I like the more indepth nature of the world mentioned in this one.

Very well written story, described in details world, a lot of hot stuff, no horror (like in some others in "sex mage" line)... I enjoyed it greatly! Hope you will not abandon this topic and eventually come to a new excellent story (preferably incestous, it might be very interesting plot:).

The story is well written and I do like that for the most part the English is to a reasonable standard.... well from my peasants understanding of it anyway ;). Certainly the story does also make an attempt to investigate and think about some of the serious dilemma's that would arise from a development like this.

However the whole line of stories are ALL Horror. Not a single one is anything but Horror and anyone who thinks otherwise is clearly not thinking things through. The ability to control the mind through sexual arousal would be cripplingly powerful. A lot of the "so-called good females" are still doing things that are entirely wrong and would violate a person in so many ways. Quite frankly mixed with how.... weak willed... your men are in the stories the entire premise is utterly terrifying. The human mind is the last refuge and in any situation you ALWAYS have a choice. Perhaps not an obvious one, but one is present. That someone could remove the ability to reason and decide on a choice of action is utterly terrifying. I have to say I read a few and more and more that thought simply came to the fore front due to the scale of this world. It stops any arousal quite frankly.

While being aroused is a reflex action at times I think you underestimate the ability for a man to control his arousal if he so chooses. The power also seems to have some inconsistences in moving from a mental block/play to outright body control of a violent nature.... I can assure you if someone threatened my sister with gang rape any arousal would be replaced with a bloody determination to snap the said persons neck on the spot.... No amount of teasing, mental or otherwise would replace the base instinct for survival.

Which comes to my final point, you clearly in these stories seem to hold "arousal" above "survival" for most males. Despite in several cases the male being in a situation that would trigger your survival instinct. From someone who has been down a fair few fox holes.... survival is the strongest of any instinct.

I'm assuming you're the same person who just commented on a couple other stories. I think you're largely missing the point of the fetish, and you should realize these stories a) don't reflect my actual beliefs of the human thought process, and b) are not something you should take seriously. Also, this is magic we're talking about, not normal arousal, so it probably isn't going to be remotely realistic to a real world situation.

I disagree that the majority of these stories are Horror. The premise may be scary to you, but the whole "forced gynocracy" genre of femdom has a lot of fans. My work is just a small speck in the wider pool of stories which usually involve things like men being put in spiked chastity belts and having their balls stomped on, and still being helpless to resist being aroused by such things. Personally, I hate that stuff, so my version using silly comic book magic powers. Though, I suppose on a philosophical level, my stuff could be much more horrifying if you want to look at it that way.

All I can say is, if you don't like what you've read so far, you probably aren't going to like any of the rest of it. Some of my work has "good" women being truly good, but a lot of it is just cruel incessant cock teasing.

However, you do make a point about misleading descriptions and mislabeled categories. If you found my work because you saw it listed under the BDSM category and were insulted, I apologize. Wasn't my intent. Looking them over, I suppose a few of the stories are probably mislabeled. The descriptors are extremely limited in space, so I don't know how much better I can describe some of them with only 60 or so letters to work with. I shall keep that in mind in future submissions, though. I'll see if I can get some story categories adjusted, but Lit can take quite a long while to process things, and edits don't always seem to go through.

This was a wonderful story. The only sad thing for me was that Nikki never seemed to find any joy in denying or delaying male orgasms. I was hoping that she would eventually.

Good story was an actual story and didn't just go SEX SEX SEX

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"The classes were being held at an old motel on the outskirts of the city that had recently been refurbished. A sizeable café attached to the motels reception area had likewise been refurbished, and converted partially into a small assembly haul."

Which was refurbished, the city or hotel? Also, was it difficult to move the assembly? I have never had to haul and assembly, generally I have been in an assembly hall but never had to haul an assembly. Just asking. Do you get those haulers at U-Haul?