All Comments on 'No'

great little story. Absolutely love it.

5 stars - I like this story.

Well done.

We have a lot of Disney stories here on Lit.

They're very popular and I have nothing against them.

Some of them are really great stories.

But for me to give a Disney story top ratings,

it's got to be full Disney or something equal to that.

Disney adds humor to their fairytales.

That works.

You can also use suspense, mistery or other elements.

But a fairytale alone,

even though well written and plotted,

only gets 4 out of 5 from me.

Fine work. Thank you.

...but so well told I didn’t quite see the end coming until it was too late. Very goo...No. Bravo.

5-stars & Favorite.

Continue to write or not this is your choice, we all have our own personal opinions which can elate or damage a writers soul, so I will say nothing more

Nice story, and I loved the “no” hook, especially coming from Alisha at the end. You used “No” as a positive, “saving” sentiment, and made that your theme. Very clever. Thanks for writing!

Wonderful story line with interesting twist between mother and daughter. The mother holding such bitterness all the years destroyed her own life. The daughter has the fortitude to break from the soul destroying bitterness of her mother at the end of this chapter.

Lovely well.written story, very clever using the word no like that. Definite 5* well deserved

Wonderful....just wonderful.

Wow! What a beautiful and uplifting tale.

lol. this is not how smart people do business.. you get a bunch of lawyers first. then write ironclad NDAs and give paltry sum to complete the deal. especially when dealing with destitutes about to leave the town.

To the readers who didn't catch it: yes, there is an interracial aspect to the story. The author subtly and skillfully portrayed it in the mannerisms and expressions of the various characters. I found it delightfully accurate, but not stereotypical. Since it didn't dominate the story I'm fine with this being in LW.

OTOH, O_pathetic_Knightmaire, you are the only person here who believes that any race or ethnicity has an inherent moral superiority or inferiority that needs to be protected from mischaracterization in fictional art. What are you afraid of? Do you really think that reading a brief tale on an 'erotic' website is going to convince anyone that Uncle Tom's Cabin wasn't an accurate portrayal of interracial strife a century ago?

I enjoyed this story and I hope to see another chapter following this one.

Geez the balls on the ex wife after all the years that passed by. Hopefully she ends up in the gutter or faced down floating in the river or better yet, jumping off that same bridge.

Oh, thank you! I really enjoyed that.

i guess the only revenge he could get was living well while the ex, lover and daughter lived a miserable life. ppl the ex are selfish and will do anything to get their way including manipulating a young girl against her father. hope she rots in fictional hell

Nice short little piece. Good twist and use of repetition in the "No" motif. I like it!

I’ll never understand people using their own kids like this and warping them with lies and deceit. It’s absolutely monstrous and it’s honestly far worse than the cheating or even a brutal divorce. This is pure emotional and mental abuse that most never recover from. This mother has destroyed her daughter who has clearly hit rock bottom. As a father I cannot fathom doing this to my own kids.

Well done jamesapple.

Seriously? 5 stars, Outstanding!

excellent

Great. Would love to see it expanded a little more.

Really wonderful, want more of these characters instead of what feels like the cliff notes version of the story. 5*

Okay, I've now read both your short stories. You have a great handle on the short format. Even if you only come out with something a few times a year I'll still be eagerly waiting to read them.

Great story, liked it a lot. There can be justice for those who hold true.

5/5

5 stars for this great story.

Simple and well written.

Fucking awesome

Good story, very good theme. Excellently done.

Brilliant

Brilliant reuse of that one short word.

Good karma story.

Just an FYI - there's an email that seems to be sent from me to those who have commented on my story. I didn't send it and am greatly appreciative of all comments, good, bad, or borderline unintelligible.

Life lessons, Perhaps waited on some who visit here. Well done, thanks for sharing.

Very well done. Emotionally satisfying and crisp.

Damn, that is one great story! Well done. You deserve a 5!

No. You built a compelling story around that short but powerful word. Well done, sir.

Not a wasted word. Ending especially good; didn’t see that coming. Well done.

Second time reading- loved it more this time. This will be a classic.

Good story, I'm glad I found it again. 5 stars

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One can find forgiveness for the daughter, who made some bad decisions at a young impressionable age, but that forgiveness is much more improbable for the ex-wife. Still openly hostile towards her ex-husband for whatever reason, it's simply impossible to forgive someone who won't change, won't recognize or admit to their errors, and refuses to seek forgiveness.

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Look in the Bible for yourselves: there are NO examples of forgiveness without repentance (turning away from) their errors (sins) and asking for forgiveness. Forgiveness is not offered to those who don't actively seek it.

Absolutely wonderful, beautiful, and powerful.

outstanding!

I loved this story, it was short, but such powerful emotions were playing. Dave was the centre of the story, but a minor player and told from Alisha's PoV this just worked.

Well done, very well done!

Masterful.

Not one word too many; not one emotion too few.

🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟

Very well done

Powerful! I think I'm in love with Alisha. Too bad; I'm 77 and she is fictional. Oh, well.lpw

Short, sweet, powerful, packed with emotion. An amazing story.

Great story. Brilliant ending with the "No".

Great ending! Thanks for the story.

One of the best.

I dislike how easily writers on this site have the fathers abandon their daughters after they fuck up.

While I can only imagine the pain of my daughter telling me not to visit anymore, I don't think I couldn't not try to embrace her again the moment she walked back into my life.

I'm glad that he at least gets to try to get over his mad at his daughter now that his other daughter has brought her back.

Such a beautiful story. The cadence; the unmeasured rhythm; a real plainsong.

Good, but unfinished story.

It made me cry. Just when I needed to hear this message, This small gem made me cry. Thank you.

Don't give them a dime.

Excellent!!

Wow!

Extremely well written

Excellent

Absolutely Wonderful, Thank You James!

So good

So good in so few words. Well done.

Very good but needs a sequel

Mfj

damn wow

So much emotion and content in such a short story. A bona-fide masterpiece.

Had Alisha not stopped Jasmine it would be 5 stars. The ending ruined it for me.

Exactly BECAUSE Alisha stopped Jasmine it is a Hall of Fame 5.

🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟

Great story!

5***** A well written story involving greed, betrayal, suicide prevention, loyalty, love, morality, and second chance, plus all this in a short story. Write on!

Nice job, tightly written, very well done.

Another great story, WOW great emotion keep writing you are a,great author!!!

Wow! Deep, too many tears. 5

The fourth time reading it. I still love it. No sex, and no blood. AND THE BEAR STILL LOVES IT. 5 stars. It is still in the top ten of my favorites because I can't figure out to change the ranking without deleting it. This is a great story. Thank you again.

The BEAR

i did't actually shed a tear thiis time, but my eyes did sting for a minute.

Excellent premise and execution. Well done. KUDOS!

Loved it!

Meh. This started out as a WONDERFUL 5 star story, till the woman inexplicably decided to finally write the check destroying nearly everything the story was worth; and then the last line made the story utterly bleh. She wasn't a 6 year old brainwashed by her mother for years. She was a 15 year old who betrayed her father, at an age when her ancestors married, had jobs and had kids. She doesn't deserve being taken back. I'm giving this 3 stars for the first half of the story, but it's super disappointing that some useless mercy made that half wholly meaningless.

Tierra writing the check? Meh... Jasmine ripping it apart? Meh.... Alisha saying "No"? Chef Kiss.

Well done.

Thank you for an uplifting story.

More people today, in all ways, need to say, "No!"

"I don't care what the people say....." to paraphrase the song, this story is great. I think this is the fourth or fifth time I've read it, and only the third time I've commented. Great. 5 stars, the Bear loves it. Thanks, again. It's right up there with "All MY Fault", in my humble opinion, the best story ever published on this site. You should have won some type of award.

The BEAR

Fantastic story.

As an anony, I can take advantage of hitting the rating stars time and time again, but I don't. I cannot stand the 1-bombers who try and artificially skew the arbitrary rating system for these amateur authors.

I don't even 1-star cuck shit. If I don't like it, I just back out and choose another.

But for this story I am going to make an exception. I am going to 5-star it three times.

Why? Just because of the absurdity of inka2222's post.

To give the money, on a superficial level, would have been bowing to blackmail, basically. It would have been a solution to rid the family of the ex's toxic presence, upon her declaration that she was leaving for a new start. We all know how effective that would have been, though the new wife didn't.

But that's not the reason that she changed her mind. It was the daughter's change in her position. Because she acknowledged that she'd been wrong, and stated that she was done and they were leaving, Tierra recognised that she wasn't anywhere as bad as her mother, and simply granted HER mercy.

With that act, she showed everyone there that she was able to rise above and be better than the ex. Be better than everyone there, actually.

Thus, her actions precipitated the following scenes, where the daughter eviscerated the ex, and then went back to the door to rip up the cheque.

That act soundly demonstrated real... REAL contrition and regret. It showed that she fully realised the error of her ways. She asked for nothing, expected nothing, but undertook her act to shed herself of a further blight on her own integrity.

Then Alisha made herself a real hero in the story, by recognising in this stranger that she was truly sorry, that she would no longer act as an enemy, and she needed help and love.

Then she, like her mother, even like Dave when he stopped Tierra deserting Alisha and ending her life, rose above the natural instincts of protectively fighting a perceived enemy, and granted mercy.

Everything is right with this story, and inka2222, I feel sorry for your soul.

This is still one of the best stories on this site! 5 stars every time I read it!

fooking brilliant 99 stars

Great story.

Second read. Just as good as the first time. One of better stories on LW. Thanks

What can I say? Great story.

Well done. You got incredible mileage out of that two-letter word in this story. I’d love to see what you can do with just “A” or “I”. :) 5*

What a bitch. The new family was a huge upgrade.

And that’s why there are too many divorcee’s and not enough widowers

Wow, working my way through your writings and thus far all great, with nice twists on the norm too impressed.

Very good and nice story! Congratulations!

Nice.

I love this story. Despite its shortness it is so complete.