by ilikeithot6308
Nice Finish!!! THANK YOU for a fun story. You could advance Jane and Gary 15 years with a family that includes Helen.
Shit another one just warming up. Was hoping to read more with Helen involved.
Didn't really like her surprise.
Felt more like cheating.
These things are supposed to be discussed first.
Incredibly erotic story and as usual, told extremely well. I can't wait for the next chapter and hope they find their happily ever after!
got the balls of a teenager...!
Presuming Helen a gold star-would have been fun to read about her losing her het cherry.
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Good story, but dropped a bit from Chapter 1 until now - in my humble opinion. Primarily to the speed factor. From "first date" on Friday night, the whole timeline was rushed/faster than it should have been. If I interpreted it correctly, somewhere along about Sunday Morning our heroine Jane called up Helen and invited her to introduce her to the pleasures of a female tongue, and then the three of them had a great time, only to have Helen go home so that they could be alone on Monday morning. Not likely - if you'd had them dating for a few weeks and that happen, OK - but on the first weekend together, it was too much.
Likewise, although my praise for not making technical mistakes on Chapter one was good, a couple of minor ones here.
If so Facto = ipso facto
Lacey = lacy
Like I said, minor. Still, all-in-all, a very hot story. Really enjoyed it!
When you next put fingers to the keyboard, we need to see where this goes, either as a couple or a threesome.
Enjoying this. Like to see where these two go. I don't think it needs more than the people involved. Just to see these 2 end up together permanently would be nice.
More please, I'm really enjoying these stories, what happens next?
if you are still writing-------this story needs another chapter or two, please.
I thought that it would be Helen that caught them in the act. How will she fit in going forward? Will she let Gary have her? Don't leave us hanging!
I'm quite pleased with your character integrity. Doing the obvious and having the father and son electricians join in a gang bang would have seriously undermined the image you've carefully crafted for Jane. Having pop get on to an over enthusiastic 'knucklehead" , say maybe "Knock it off, junior! This ain't internet porn. Show the lady some respect", might have been a way to go. Along with a "Thank you, Ma'am. That was a special treat". Don't mind me, can't write worth a crap. I'm enjoying my read through your posted stories. Please forgive me if I occasionally forget to vote (even on the old ones).
Would love to have you continue this series. I am enjoying the growth in Jane. Would love to see if her daring continues.
there are a lot of possibilities about where this could end up - would be fun to explore further - great story 5* as usual
But I would be both scared and wary as hell that her exhibitionism would show up at the most inopportune times. No set of jugs is worth jail time.
I do believe that more chapters are required. At least one more before a happily ever after, he's yet to fuck Helen's brains out.
Thanks. I think you have satisfied about 75% of my teenage fantasies. So where will it go from here? I think another chapter is warranted. Maybe some fucking in a public place? Need to explore the Helen dimension as well.
Great work.
Cheers SB1
Thank you, I am just loving this story, it really is a joy to read a romantic loving tale that has the 'feel good factor'.
More power to your pen!
This is another exceptional story. I like that you threw in the thoughts of cheating in there and allowed the two to work it out. The story also continues your writing styleof basically love at first sight/fast feelings of love. I look forward to seeing where you take these 2 or 3. Will Gary turn Helen into a bi-sexual instead of a declared lesbian? Will the 2 become 3 in a polyamorous relationship? Will they get caught at work by a boss? Much potential.
Another fantastically written story. I await the upcoming adventures of these three and know it will be well worth the wait, with so much to work with. Thank you again and keep the stories and participants coming...
Noel
I had to re-read the first two chapters for a refresher before getting to this one. Oh no, what a chore...