All Comments on 'No Mercy Ch. 02'

unbelievable! I'm impressed with how well you managed to maintain Jake's character from the 1st chapter. Well done.

...but very well written.

Mu pussy is so wet from your story... again! As always, I came so hard after reading your story. I love what Holly had to go through! I just want it harder, filthier and nastier next time. Thank you for making me cum :-)

Omg that is so fucking hot!!!

I read this last night & had to read it again this morning because it was so hot, this is so what I would like to happen to me, made my pussy drip both times. Would love more of what they did to Holly the rest of the weekend x

Wow.... I love all Ur stories.... can I be ur holly?? Hehe....

Holly cow! That was nasty, yet incredibly hot. Fantasy, gotta luv it. Would also enjoy this story as told from Holly's perspective.

Holy fuck you have a great way with words. And I second BallsofSteel's idea to tell this same story from Holly's perspective. You did such a great job with this story. I can totally see myself as Holly. Shy, fantasizing about this whole thing, but not sure if I could ever follow through with it. Unless I got gang banged into submission like that. Fantastic.

i loved the story! my master has talked about a threesome,, sure wish you guys could help us out!!

i have never done anything like that,,, but right now.... i am so wanting to!!!!!! be used,,, for a bunch of guys enjoyment!!

gotta go find my dildo,,,,, that is all i have right now

Even with all the violent acts you found a way to include raw eroticism. Although not my idea of a night in...it was an easy read & I enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing!

WOW WOW WOW !!!

OMG i had to use my dildo at least three times during this story!

my god im so horny now its unreal!!!!!!

but you wrote very well and I like your plots, quite original really. I wouldn't mind to see a story in reverse when a guy being used by several women, it would be so hot ...

Your alter ego is rather a low down dirty heel, but you write superbly. I'd love to read a story about the after-effects, physical and otherwise, of this rough treatment on Holly. She struck me as the most interesting of the four characters.

I know others have complained about the wordiness of your work, but I really enjoy that. I find other writers get stuck using the same cliched verbs and adjectives, and because of that their sex scenes are often too brief to be of any use. You use a wide range of vulgarities, and I thank you for it.

would it be bad of me to wish that this would happen to me Sir? Dirty, naught, and hard...with no mercy...

With these guys being so horny and sex-driven, why did they pull OUT to cum on her? In real life, (not sex videos), REAL guys strain to cum INSIDE the pussy, ass or mouth of their victims! Cum belongs INSIDE!!

Thank you for the comment, Marc. No Mercy is a full-on totally salacious hardcore fantasy. It's explicit and very visual in nature, hence all the explosive exterior cumming. The guys want Holly to look as slutty as she feels. Ultimately the story is not to be taken seriously or as anything resembling most people's real life experience. 'Real men' outside of this fictional world don't have 'victims' by the way. They have willing partners. Worth saying.

I don't ever think I've gotten this turned on by a story before.. now to find the boyfriend and drag him back to bed. :)

How i wish i was Holly in this story. And if i were the Emily Jake is telling the story to, i'd be so anxious and ready for the visit he hints at. Only maybe i'd be hoping he and his friends would show me even less mercy.

This is one of the best I've read on here.

More TURN ON,

Great writing for us mature couple

Jaymal keep up the good stories

Perhaps you could include some Illustrated photos, this would add greatly to your stories. . Think all your readers would appreciate this addition

i had actually read this story a couple years ago and only just remembered after reading it today! the effect it had on me this time was just as, if not more intense than the first.

im happy to have found this story again and will be reading more of your work.

also, i appreciate how well you write; the proper grammar, cohesion, and overall fluidity made for an uncommonly enjoyable read! thank you.

i hope there is more to this series

wish you would do the next one in this.... how he explain to the next girl how him and his friends use the girl he was writing to this time...

I was in the mood for something outrageously filthy - and got it in spades. Brilliantly done - no holds barred - made me feel quite tainted. Loved it.

'Yeah, yeah, I did... It's just your cock's so big...' Shit, Emily, was that a reason for me not to do it?

how helpless and tempted he is in his lust for tight dick squeezing ass she just has no idea how heavenly women asshole feels?

i mean how can he not fuck her in the ass and after reminding him he has a big dick that her vaccum sealed tight asshole is the best place where his big dick should actually damn i am so jealous of him i want a holly for me right now

just the way he says shit emily this is even more the reason he should fuck her ass only with big cock

i literraly wanked off my cock so hard at these lines

this is the best line i feel like i am him almost to fuck hollys ass she tells me the excuse that my cock is too big for her ass which tempts me even more how heavenly it would feel to put the biggest cock into the smallest tighest hole ever , reminds me of the first time i got the chance to put my 6 inch pole into the best asshole i ever got

love the way he conveys his lust to emily while describing sizzling undeniable hot scenario he finds himself in

what i actually find disturbing was that being a big cock guy he should have used gental thrusts in the beginning (instead of the rough sudden and hard thrust by jake) into her tight ass reason being its been a lomg time also he should have asked her to prepare/dilate her ass at home

i dont understand the unnecessary need to make anal to painal

for vagina sudden thrust actually excites women but not anal

its already painful why to make it super painful he has big cock she is unprepared so either they had used somd buttplugs or small dildos or anal beads to give her some dilation needed

i suppose the author doesnt want her ass to dilate as he wants it to be at its tighest to maximise his pleasure

but considering that she isnt fighting and she has two more big cock to continue the torture of her already abused asshole

i am very aware with "i like the way it hurts" bullshit

i know she desires its secretly and he is intent on no mercy

but still she is a human afterall and asshole is no pussy no matter how much used

the way he suddenly entered with relatively too hard thrust with such big cock (intended) she must be in some hospital getting her intestines stiched or bleeding ass no amount of lube can stop that

considering that your stories are very much based on realism of our world instead of pure fantasy the teenage guy use to describe the butt fuck this was absurd anal initiation

i like your stories because they are laced with realism and practicality

so the anal sex must sound real too

its impossible for her not to bleed having him entered her ass like that

this was the same problem in your other story what men really wants

the anal sex is quite unrealistic

in both the stories the main guy just thrusted too brutally into the butts of the girls w/o giving either of them time to adjust

and to most strange thing is that the girls are perfectly fine almost as if he was ver gentle with their ass

i had been very gentle with womens buttholes use a lot of lube use fingures and toys to dilate them relax them and enter very very slowly but they still feel the pain no matter how gentle and slow i am which decrease after some time i wait after putting my head completely into their holes and slowly put my full lenth gently inside her and then again wait to let them get used to dick in their ass once they tell me to start i take slow and very small thrust gradually increasing pace and ramming full lenth strokes by the end i do my best and honestly never got complaints

but they still walk funny after

but your female character never walks funny afterwards

also they relatively feel a lot less pain my share of real women which is totally illogical as your dick is way bigger than mine and you are so rough and brutal than i ll ever be ( i like my girls to scream with either pleasure or humiliation and shame i do call them my anal whore anal slut anal fucktoy which excites both of us but never pain no i do my best to lessen the pain as much as possible i dont like them in pain its too much for me)

also she seems a little reluctant but can be pursuaded easily w/o lying or putting her to pressure her into rough gangbang

all he needed was to just ask her before dating if she is willing enough to live her stories

why did he needed to trick her into a gangbang and then keep on asking for her concent?

why didnt he simply tell her in beginning that he expects her to fulfill her gangbang story in real life over the phone?

why to give her a shock?

why to have a romantic evening?

why all this mindfuck?

why trap her and then ask for consent instead of vice versa?

he aint even afraid that if the ganbang goes out of control or the girl actually got injured he might actually ruin his already decent relation with a nice reader just for one n8 fun?

isnt he a bit scared as his very devoted fan is at a high risk ?

no condoms either and the guys already go to sex clubs so they might give some STDs to pure girl too

she might have said yes herself to the whole gangbang thing had he kept on pursuading her verbally instead of setting the trap after all its her secret desire to be used with no mercy

most of your stories are centered around a sudden shock to the intended prey and thus a lil less time to analyse and get pressurised by added manipulation by the writer or main male character

is it to create excitement for readers through the scary scenarios the girls in your stories find themselves in lured by the seduction of handsome sadist dominating man who has no morals and will go to any extent by hook or crook to find naive victims to be converted to his fucktoy to be shared btw friends

i understand in the story WHAT MEN REALLY WANTS the guy had to drug the girl and lie to her to trap her so he could have all 3 of virgin holes in span of one n8 since she was naive and inexperienced and also unwilling despite being a quite submissive throughout her triple hole rape

but this girl holly might have consented herself if only he had gave her a word to keep it safe and private

also why the need to share her humiliated pictures with his colleague

i mean she is already willing so why does he need to risk her privacy and put her to some dangerous blackmail

please i dont mean to be fun spolier

i love your stories please consider them as constructive criticism and keep writing

i read it twice and still find the anal and dp a bit disturbing

hard entry to tight asshole by a big cock during anal and hard entry to pussy again by a big cock during dp while there big dick already in their is she a human or rubber doll ? why hasnt she already been torned up in both holes?

its one thing gradually going from slow to hard thrust and entry during anal and dp

but the writer seems more of sadistic nature emphasising that he entered with her rectum hard thrust despite having big dick and also the other guy entered her pussy too hard with his equally big pole while she already was getting merciless poundiing in her tender ass in a dp

she wont survive even in fantasies

unnecessary use of additional brutal force on someone so willing and submissive

painfully sadistic

made sex scenes what was really hot until anal started to painfully torturous to read

really would have been hotter with a little toned down anal and dp with some super lewed ,rauchy and humiliating verbal abuse and taunts to holly

i tried to enjoy it but both anal dp here sounded almost like some super painful anal fisting

it kinda turned to some gore sex

i am sorry but the girl is quite ready to do all bids for them so atleast the entry to both holes while anal and dp might more gentle

i am perfectly okay if they had become hard thrust with some time duration

also she seems to come only one time during the entire gangbang

so it seems it might have been a lil less pleasurable to her

'By the way, Holly,' I said, having taken tight hold of her again, 'very rude of me. This is Grant and this is Martin. Their names ring any bells?'

gave me and holly both goosebumps like some dark twist in horror movies

man what had been her reaction when she understood the whole story was writtenn to lure her into that role for that night for real

when she finally might have have understood that it was the intension of the 3 guys with the same names as their stories

no coincidence now for the names to be same as she read in her story

whose emily saw her name in other stories of yours too

Hi, my Anonymous friend - thanks for your comments, and for taking such an interest in my stories! I don't have time to say much now, but let me just say a couple of things in general response on your comments on 'What Men Want' and 'No Mercy' in particular.

'What Men Want' was written as a dark fantasy for a female friend, and should be considered as such. The reckless nature of how the Joe character behaved was indicative of the time in which the story was set, and the point he had reached in his life, hence his lack of concern for anything other than his short-term gratification.

'No Mercy' I wrote shortly after, in response to an outrageously lusty and explicit story that the same friend and I had both read. She challenged me to write something even more hardcore and nasty, so 'No Mercy' was the result. Both stories were early in my time of writing erotica, so they're both (NM in particular) raw in more than one sense, I think. I wouldn't portray anal sex like that when writing a story now, unless it was for a good narrative reason.

Let's just say I don't necessarily fuck like I wrote back then (probably just as well, right?)

Your other comments engaged my interest too, and I hope to get back to them in the near future. Hope you keep reading. I really need to post more work on here again.

Best wishes,

Jake/Jaymal.

Emily was an online friend in a failing marriage (separate from the friend who inspired me to write What Men Want), who wanted some escape and to revel in some rough-sex fantasies. She thoroughly enjoyed having all of No Mercy addressed directly to her. And no, I never actually met her, although it might have been interesting if I had.

hey jaymal

i love ur stories i hate and love the devil male characters at the same time

the way u narrate the inner turmoils ,conflicts and feelings of ur characters both male and female its mind blowing

when the male character of ur stories says that the woman told him not to fuck in her ass

and he says how emily how can i resist squeeze my hard dick into very very tighthole god i creamed my panties and my hubby almost came at that line

i mean we can feel the lust and release his dick might have felt in tearing down that super tight asshole yum even though i dont have a dick i can feel how gud spewing his cum deep into that tight asshole after rubbing through that tightness must have feel god i am super straight female but it made me wanna have a dick and put and rut into super tight asshole while kneading her soft soft ass cheeks with my hand and telling her she belongs to me now completely

i cant believe that what men want is a fantasy some dark part of me wishes it was real 😆

u know funny story i forced my husband to do the same things done to mary jane by joe while role playing and we loved it

he used me like a cheap whore and then dropped me on middle of the road while calling me dirty anal whore

and then returned back after 10-15 min kissed me all over and took me bridal style in our car and literally made love to me whole n8 calling me his princess as a reward for giving him the best n8 of rough anal fuck and domination over me

so thankyou, thankyou for making our married life so hot

i cant believe why was i so disgusted by anal and i deprived my sweet hubby even though it was the only fantasy he ever had

whenever my hubby reminds me of surrendering my anal virginity to him i get so hot i feel so dominated by him ,i mean him having my ass where no one ever had been its so naughty and intoxicating

my hubby proud of my tight ass only for him hmmm

i still cant believe

"what men want "is just some dark fantasy i mean how could it be it feels so real ?

i mean my hubby and me lived every moment of this story in the roleplay u really sure its not real and just a fantasy (what men want)

oh dont listen to neg comments about violent anal we love it

u know we even did the dp with him in my ass and rubber dildo in my pussy oh the way i came i reahed to heaven oh wow what ur story did to us

oh god please dont stop writing and write more and both of me and my hubby love ur stories and fuck each other crazy

we love u jaymal

stay blessed from the super horny depraved couple😘

Just read "No Mercy"

Please send me Holly's phone number.

That's what I call a good reading material