All Comments on 'No Parents'

Part 2 please

I can't wait for part 2

Trash...

Loved it and want more please. Where does this go from here? They still have a few days alone. Glad to see you are writing again.

Quick but good. More of the week coming?

I really like when there is a sense of emotional connection, hopefully Cindy finds her guy.... And that it might just be Ted and Dee

Decent premise, but it felt way too rushed. Not bad, but could have been great.

Apparently, they weren't all alone at home. This would've been a better story if Cindy hadn't been included. At least you didn't have her and Dee get into having lesbian sex like most writers do. I really hate that!

Love sibling sex.

I agree with the earlier comments. Extra character ruined it. I/T heat is about secrecy, breaking social norms, etc. This is just... bleh.

Please continue!

That's a really special, moving and beautifully told story. It would be great it you could take it further.

Lived through this with Ted. He, in this story, was an ideal participant, considerate, cautious, caring and affectionate. Cindy guided the pair both physically and emotion ally without jumping the line for the cherry she had craved for so long.

Hope the laundry gets done . . .

Enjoyed the sibling love. Cindy is 3rd wheel. This be shate with sister alone. More please. I love the caring relationship between siblings.

Va Ham

I gave you a 5/5 in spite of the fact that this was basically a single page story. Unless you're specifically in writing something for the 750 word challenge, then you should be submitting stories about 7500 words minimum. That's roughly how much you need to build a solid tale of passion with good character building. A prime example of why your story was too short is the out-of-place attitude changes by Dee and her brother when Cindy offers the opinion that since they're both virgins that they should commit incest to lose their cherries. 🤔 At the drop of a hat they're all in. They never thought about it until Cindy said something, but they are instantly on board with the idea. Riiiggghhhttt.

But you did do two things that I totally appreciated and that earned you a top score from me. I'll start with a quote from your story when the subject of anal sex comes up:

"Cindy says, "It's only a movie. You don't very often see one with any residue on it. These porn stars flush themselves pretty well before shooting these anal scenes. I'm with you Dee, I don't think I'll go that far. I kinda like kinky every once in a while. But I have my limits."

KUDOS!!! You have probably butt fucked someone in real life. Even if you just do a single enema, the guy is probably going to still have some "residue" on his dick (polite way of saying it). Thanks again for being REAL. I've read so many anal scenes where the author has the guy pull his dick out of a girl's ass and shove it straight into her mouth. Freaking disgusting, even in porn! 😤

The second thing that you did correctly was focusing on the love between the two siblings and how they become even closer with their sexual intimacy. They didn't just get naked and fuck each other. They made love and their affection for each other grew stronger because of their incest.

If you continue adding to this story, get Cindy off of the Marijuana. Have her take a step back and reform herself a little. I like that you didn't include the siblings into her drug abuse. It would have been better to keep it completely out of your story altogether, so I'm not going to give you any points here. It's a wash. 5/5

beautiful

Hope there is more. An entire week alone deserves much more. Great potential.

Just like previous comments, beautiful, and way too short!

Like others said it's a beautiful story with great potential. Yes it was way to short you need to write at least two pages or more. You have a whole week to fill in. Looking forward to reading more about them.

I'll have to agree with most that it was too short, but the writing and the building was done very well without becoming too vulgar. In fact, it was sorta sweet. You do have great potential.

Excellent story. Would have enjoyed reading about Cindy helping out with guiding the brothers cock into the the sisters virgin pussy as they fucked then Cindy licking their genitals as they fucked. Also to read that Cindy would suck the sisters nipples and tits then sit on her face, to give her the first taste of another vagina. Afterwards, let the brother finally get to fuck Cindy while the sister does all the same things to them. All spend the nights together exploring and learning the new things about sex

Okay, starting to get the picture now. You’re a George RR Martin. Talented writer with a short attention span.

Bunch of cry babies.

Loved it, short but sweet.

Have to say it reminded me of a weekend when my parents went away, and I was home with my sister. Only difference, we where already having sex at the time. But that weekend was the first time we had my sister's friend join us. ( We forgot she was coming over ) and we where already fucking as soon parents car turned out the street. She walked in and caught us. Her and my sister had already gone down on each other, as my sister had told me all about it. So it was easy getting her to join.

It was great, until it was mushy

Great story, just too short!

I cried impulsively

Sorry...only a 4-star story...because of the ending.

You draw us in with the 'no parents for a week's line, and cut it off after a few hours max...

This is not a wasted effort, just not enough put into it to make a five star offering.

Redeeming value, for a reader like myself, and others who have commented-you spent a lot of time on the emotional charge between sister and brother; the mutual loss of their virginities to each other speaks VOLUMES as to their everyday relationship, and how their future will progress.

Cindy...is a keeper...she is also emotionally involved, for both her friends. She 'sacrificed' her desires to help them complete their love...and will apparently continue to do so, and be part of their mutual futures!!

8" dick, you know SFA about the hymen and you're too lazy to finish the story, one star because there is no option for half a star.

Poor tonal consistency and zero realism. This isn't howreal people would act in this situation. It doesn't make sense for virgin siblings to act so candidly about sex.

great story but way too short, should haveinvolved Cindy after Dee