All Comments on 'Not In My Wildest Dreams'

You really like the phrase "... let alone ...", don't you!

Five times in the first four paragraphs! Plus another one later on.

Gets a bit repetitive.

Enjoyed so much that I never noticed the 'let alone' words that you do seem to really like for some reason, so this never really bothered me in the least.! Very good story line -- but could have gone just a tad farther as to where we more or less found out who-what-when & where all of this ended up instead of just leaving us hanging out to dry. Thanks. JAG/TSO

Not too bad, but it's generally a bit flat - like listening to a boring teacher's monotonous lecture. In addition to "let alone", you have other repetitive words such as "had" - "had decided", "had never done", "had done". The verbs are generally passionless until you get to the actual sexual encounter. For example, "we went up to my room and I invited him in." While going thesaurus crazy isn't the solution, some variation in the sentences both in structure and the liveliness of the language would make it a more pleasurable read.

Dialog makes the characters come alive. It allows you to be so much more expressive with them and develop their personalities.

If you pick up any novel you find a liberal mix of narritive and dialog. Try reading only the narritive and you'll see what I mean.

You have a lot going for you - maximize it!

Good tale, or should I say tail? I like this story and felt my cock spasm as you let your man in. Oh the joys of entering a wet hot pussy, and if its a stranger so much the better. Always use your words and let your mind guide you. I think you know that but seeing a few of the comments below I suspect they were typed with sticky fingers, I know mine are.

Love to chat with someone so sensual and erotic, if you find me to your satisfaction so much the better, nothing like a satisfied woman

Luv wud be the icing on top... but not WR's style. And his end; best avoided