All Comments on 'Now Mother's Gone Pt. 03'

Second person narrative lost me by the end of the first paragraph. Perhaps it would be a wonderful story narrated in first or third person. But this is your fantasy you’re writing, not mine. Make it yours, and let me make it mine if your writing is good enough. Don’t try to force it on me.

I read the description.

I don't have a daughter, and had no interest in finding what you had to say about my non-existant daughter, so scrolled forward to hit the ever-popular (for you) 1 star button.

How many people need to tell you that you suck at second person for you to believe them?

Lol I'm starting to get the feeling some people don't like the second person perspective?

Good to see you're still here cagey, I do hope these little outbursts help you in someway. All criticisms of my writing aside, just as one human to another, I do worry about this festering hatred you seem to be filled with... Proudly coming back time and time again to attack something you freely admit you haven't read... Really seems like a cry for help.

Do you just need someone to talk to? I'm genuinely offering an ear. You don’t have to just try and push everyone away. These tantrums are just... sad really. I hope you can move past them someday, and feel safe to publish your own creativity. Much love, Jerk.

Hey, Cageysea 9725. If you don't like the stories, why are you reading them you moron? 5 stars from me, keep it up!

Hey anonymous, why do you come here if you can't be bothered to sign up?

As an exercise in logic, answer me this. If I haven't read it, how do I know if I like it or not?

You say I'm the moron.

I'm about to disappoint a reviewer or two, sorry. But I believe 2nd person was the perfect way to tell this story. I will however say that the closing (ending) of the story was a bit letdown.

Hehe, I wouldn't worry... I believe some of my dedicated reviewers are a disappointment to themselves. Interestingly, no-one’s complained that neither the father or daughter have a name yet... which was another choice I made when starting this all those years ago. This is not the end by a long shot, I'm just having to decide where the story logically splits into smaller chunks from its original posting.

Wait where is the next part. You can’t leave me like this.

Sorry dear reader. Have been rather busy in RL and have not had time to edit much for literotica. Hopefully should have more time soon. However, if you really can't wait check my bio for the site where all my stories were originally written.