All Comments on 'Nucturnal Emissions'

I liked the setup and enjoyed how the story developed - The kinky wife wanting to help her daughter become a woman. How he reacted to Kelly's complicity. Krista's thoughts. All good, but could/should have been developed much further.

The payoff, sorry to say, was poor. IMO you lost sight of your characters and turned the story into a wank fest.

Knowing Krista was about to lose her virginity to her father, Kelly would have been concerned for her daughter. She would have wanted it to be a loving experience. Instead you turned Kelly into a mad madam pimping out her slut daughter. The characters disappeared and were replaced by porn stars.

When you think you have finished a story, the urge to post it straight away is powerful, but must be overcome. If you re-read your story, not only would you have spotted the mistakes, but you would have realised how much more you could/should have written.

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Fuck this is dumb....

This may be the hottest story I've read on this site...

Who gives a shit about the son!

"The men meet the national average to I am afraid. I measure maybe eight inches" Eight inches is well above the national average. That's more like six. Eight inch cocks are a lot less common than D cup breasts, for instance.

Loved the build! So hot to have Mom pushing the whole sexy scene. Well done!

That was one of the fucking hottest stories I have found here. I can't wait for a follow up. We'll done..I need to get rid of my stuffy now

Mom should have straddled daughter so they could clean each other up.

Your average is anything but. He is about 2.5 inches bigger than average. And so is his dick. Wife is about 4 inches shorter than average, daughter 2 inches.

Got the boobs a bit big too for average, although you never stated what size his were.

Was dad a bastard because the son was so useless to mom? Did she try to use the son to get something going because Mr "Average?" wasn't giving her what she wanted or she wanted daughter to be daddy's slut, so she could be son's bitch?

Too many loose ends or empty holes in character building!

Sex would have been better understood if characters would have been developed better like in some of your other stories

Mom should have been slurping Krista during the last fuck. Well written story.

What a great and very stimulating story! Pay no attention to those who think you could have done better. Well developed and a great ending. Leaves me wondering what cums next.

The hymen isn't three inches in. He should have popped that before he even got in her.

". . . The men meet the national average to I am afraid. I measure maybe eight inches . . . "

Sorry, eight inches is not average.

Awesome!!!!

That was fkn hot !

So where is part two of this very fucking HOT story? And what’s the back story of why mom and daughter got the idea to fuck daddy like they did?

Still, it’s definitely a five star gem ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️❤️

Oh. My. God!