by oggbashan
half way through this story I had no idea I was on a porn site, this was so grippingly intense. I never skip and read ahead when I read but when the air was forcing out of her lungs I had to look ahead to see if she was alive at the end. You had me completely gripped. Bravo. What a treasure to be found in the most unexpected place. Thank you.
and well written. A nice change from the 'norm', whatever that may be ;o)
This story was very compelling and sexy, even without the sexy play-by-play. Loved it!
Actually, it was a very well written story with credible dialog and well painted scenes. I thought the Dorothy in Oz ending was a bit of a cop out. "Oh, thank heavens, Auntie Em! It was all just a dream." But it was craftily camouflaged.
It has a message, it makes you think. I liked it a lot.
Og, I've always felt that you were a wolf in sheeps clothing when it came to writing, and this story just proves my point. What a excellent tale you wove, and as someone else remarked, a plot that seemed all too real. Well done!
I was riveted. This is not a story to read lightly. It was disturbing in a way that makes one think. Thank you for this, Og.
I was awfully worried about this one ending badly, but it didn't. A great story, Og.
You caught me up in the tale, and had me interested in everything. Well done. Good luck in the contest