All Comments on 'Obsessed with Mr. Alexopoulas'

This was a terrific story. The whole concept of the company having slaves for workers is a terrific one. And it happens so often today only without the mind control, lol.

It was also well thought out and presented. Very well written and hot as hell. A perquisite of any top caliber EMC story.

On the constructive criticism side: I wish MaryAnderson had taken a bit of a longer turn with this. By that I mean having Maria slowly notice various changes in Lisa over a longer period of time and becoming suspicious. That part happened very fast. Maria becoming suspicious and having a more lengthy investigation into Lisa's new obsession with work and new interests (like the gym) that excluded others would have been great had it gone on longer and been more detailed. It would have also really accentuated the changes in Lisa more if the writer had done it that way.

Also the conversion of Maria was too fast for me. I think the whole thing about the changes in Maria would have been much better and sexier if she slowly, slowly began to change during her longer curiosity and investigation of Lisa and her new attitudes.

Those are the two things that kept this story from being a true EMC classic in my view.

But even with what I think are the two flaws, this story was terrific, well thought out and executed. And hot.

I considered a more gradual transformation, especially for Maria, but in the end decided I wanted to keep the focus of the story on the hypnosis itself. I find I enjoy writing about the means of mind control as much as I do about the result. However, there are a number of good ideas here that I will consider in future stories.

"He had the oversized pulsating balls of a potent fecund centaur."

I have no idea what this is supposed to make me imagine, but it's freaking awesome. Half the reason I read this site is for stuff like this, lol.

Sorry but this should really be in non-consent. That way there is a warning that the story is going to essentially be rape fantasy. I understand the mind control aspect of the story but still written more as a rape.