All Comments on 'Oceans'

To me this was a rather different and complex plot by SS6.

This was an interesting story, but not up to SS's usual standards. In the passage where Kerri is telling her story, she never did really admit to sleeping with her clients or explain why she did it, and it wasn't really included in her delusion. This could have been much better.

This may be one of my favorites SSG......

... and did nothing about it so he could stage a disappearing act...

and years later give a long monologue that included three strange dreams...

and he never realized he could probably have stopped the cheating right at the beginning...

in other words, a wimp

I did like it, the whole concept of a famous artist disappearing without explanation was pretty good stuff. My problem was with all the crazy dreams about oceans and pirates and samurai and Darth Vader, and all that crazy shit. I know that the character, the "artiste", explained, with much psyco-babble mumbo-jumbo what the dreams meant and how they affected him. But for me they were just a big waste of time that interfered with "getting on with the story ". I enjoy a story that reads as though I am listening to someone tell a story. And I really ain't interested in dreams unless they REALLY move the story along.

So many words to say so little.

enjoyable, too much side tracking. slap hapy papy #9

So many stories start with a confrontation with someone from the past, and then skip back to tell history. I love it when it's done through dialogue, as in a character telling that story. This was 90% history but it all took place in the present as dialogue. Some more interaction between the characters in the room to establish it would have been cool, but it's just more digestible to me for some reason. Good experiment.

Nearly every fucking character is unlikeable. Forget the whore. Legolas/Larry the fuckhead walking away from Dana was the douchiest part of the story by far. Good guy my ass

FUCK YOU anonymous, if you don't like the stories then don't FUCKING READ THEM

This is really a tale of a couple who let their careers and work get in the way of their marriage which was doomed as their relationship failed. they are both to blame for its failure.

I've read this through over and over. It's absolutely a work of art.

Could have done without all that dream and imagery crap.

And the conversations of Legolas and Kerri with the audience ... who would sit still and listen to that rubbish.

The plot line was quite good IMO.

StangStar06

I have been an avid reader of your tales during my personal pilgrimage through Literotica. I have always been entertained by you skilled use of plot development, even when you throw a quirky twist into the mix, as well as your ability to breathe life into your characters. "Oceans" has raised the bar yet again. The story was the key element....sex was a prop but was never used to excess. That fucking moving Pirate statue blew me away. So unexpected...and so very much you, my friend. Thank you for this contribution. May you live long and prosper!

I got as far as page 5’s day dream section and had to give up on the story. The first few pages were quite entertaining and the story appeared to be a worthwhile read but it deteriorated rapidly. By page 5 it was a disaster and not worth pursuing. I know this is fiction but for this type of fiction to have credibility it must have at least some possibility of occurring in real life.

Dialogue was painful to read and repetitive.

Five (5) well deserved stars

Enjoy most of your work. This one just dragged on and on.

You sir, are an artist.

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Wow! Criticism from a poster with zero published stories... Thanks for nothing Lee.

It's StangStar06. Not one of his better stories, but even Kevin Costner makes a bad movie once in a while . He gets the car right every time, and that is always enough. 6 stars, for old times sake, but get out of Soho, please ,and back to the real world. The Bear always approves, sometimes with a grain of salt.

The BEAR

Couldn’t get into this one, which is unusual when I read an SS06 story. The dream sequences seemed to make the story a little too scattered.

I did like the Vader/Luke interplay.

5 pages of weird shit

The exposition style doesn't seem to work for this. Kerri ends up sounding both very perceptive and incredibly stupid at the same time.

Far too long to be a decent story.

I liked most of the story but I zoned out in the dream sequences.

Good argument, but too many and too long dream sequences. Also, a giant animatronic revolutionizing the art world... that was ridiculous.

a solid 4 star story. I had the honor of going to school with a gifted artist . Me and My best friend always looked out for her . she was such an innocent young lady . The smartest guy in school tried to rape her . My buddy beat him like a drum . I also got kicked out of school for beating him up . Maybe he wasn't as smart as he thought .

Very enjoyable story, a little verbose though. I do love your usual story length but in this case the expansion in the middle chapters was not necessary. Still a 5 star effort. Love your work. My criticism is as a reader not as a writer. I do not have that ability.

The dreams were dumb. The story would have been fine without it. No one remembers dreams like that.

Well…could u be a little

Less verbose and finish the story in 3 pages…For finally when u get to the neat of the matter …that’s what it is worth! Rest all is useless padding ..did not add anything to the story!

I guess I'm a little frustrated. These people seemed so real and I bought into them but I don't understand how the core problem in their relationship, her cheating and separation from him, was hardly even mentioned. I'm ending the story in a very disturbed frame of mind. It seems like if they really did love one another, one conversation about the boundaries of their relationship early in their marriage would have solved the problem.

The dreams took away from it and sword obsession makes it seem immature, but the rest could be a great story.

Distracted and disjointed. The crazy dreams added nothing to the story and fragmented everything. if you had stuck to the storyline, which underneath all the extraneous detours was quite good, it could have been an entertaining and satisfying tale. This was a big disappointment in that the central story got pushed aside to make room for your little dreamscape Star Wars/Pirates of the Caribbean escapades that failed to connect as any meaningful insights into the drama of a failed marriage. The sword fetish didn’t add anything to the story either. It was just another distraction and seemed juvenile.

Actually fantastic. The dreams tied it together very well.

Far too long for what it was.

loved the dream sequences and I admit I did not really get the meaning until you reentered the dreams at the end. As always thank you and love the way you write

5 Stars on a great Story . You and Todd and JPB and DQS are always great to read .

As usual another fine read. Thanks for ur time n hard work it was enjoyed n appreciated.

This is My favorite Story here . I Hope that you realize that after Dana died and all of the Paintings control went back to Legs . Doesn't that mean that Kerri gets half of them . My Ex went after My retirement . I slowed her some Pictures I had taken 2of her and her Boy Toy . She sis not want her Dad seeing them so I got to keep my pension . Best Story here . I read it about Twice a Month

So he turns a statue into a animatrominc but know he actually dances 😂 Dude evef heard less is more in Art 😃

3 stars - TMI about the art industry and way too much info about their screwed up relationships.

The SLUT cheated and got dumped - end of story.

It should have been about 4 pages long.

IS IT FINALLY OVER????!!!?! They should’ve used this story to torture the terrorists. Forcing them to read this drivel would’ve been so much more effective than water boarding.

I can’t believe how big of a fool I am for skimming 8 pages of pure crap. Can I get some Bleach Bit for my brain?

Reread I really enjoy this one. I’m sure I am not the only one who really appreciates all the effort you put into your stories

Christ was that a long tedious story could of said all that in two pages.

5 Stars and I am glad that Larry and Anna lived happy ever after .

I'm not sure I could have read this without coffee and other drugs. That was horrible. The beginning was good, so was the ending. But in between? That was less than nothing.

very good writing, interesting, but a page or two too long for my taste.

It was nice to get info on Raphe and Amanda, I was wanting an update.

4 stars on a story i like . I wonder where they made love as Aria was in his bed ?

This started out as a good tale, then a DRONE m hold. The story drones on till the reader gets nauseated.

WOW mate I am really impressed this story was superb Almost up in the "saddletramp" heights (sorry ) Kepp up the GREAT work (jaybee186)

Creative story. Parts of it seemed like the author was on acid but in an entertaining way. Kerri was mentally diseased. Suspect she must have been cheating for much longer than Legolas expected. The moving statue was a hilarious shot at modern art world but was also an impossibility on that time scale. When Dana died, when paintings reverted to Legolas, Kerri would get half on divorce. Unless Dana set up a trust before her death for her daughter or bequeathed them to Aria with Legolas as a guardian. Nothing was mentioned about that. Middle 4 pages could have been compressed. Still 4.5 stars. Just because so off the wall, but long.

Ironic that Denny got destroyed. Yes he was haughty and prideful, but he actually did the MC a favor. And no Denny never f$cked Kerri. He insulted her as a whore publicly and then his comment about him and the MC being two of the only artists NOT f$cking Kerri. Harsh truth, but he gets crapped on and destroyed. Sure MC was upset and defended his wife's honor for inscrutable reasons. She has serious mental issues. Sounded like the intense adultery with her stable of boy toy artists ramped up over the last six months, but like roevious commenter speculated, probably started eveb earlier as she acquired clients. What is odd is besides the "missing pieces" psychobabble, therr is no reason of why she did it other than being on a power trip. This author rarely has nuanced or gray reasons for why someone cheats. It is usually for crazy or brain dead reasons. If only life were that simple.

Denny shoulda ended up working at Dennys just for the humor of it :P

Way way to long! about six pages of nothing but fluff. Got extremely boring. Good ending but just to much to get there.

Denny was prideful and arrogant but why make him suffer? He actually did the mc a favor by telling it out on the media granted he confessed to it in public but he never even fucked her he didn't deserve that much of a punishment. Poor Dana, and the mc describing having sex to the them was lol. As usual in the author story, a psychotic cheating wife and a mc who just runs away

5 Stars on one of my Favorite stories . I hope that everyone likes it as much as i did . Good luck to Denny on Making the fries into a painting . I had the Honor of going to school with a sweet little Lady who could paint like no one else . She got attacked by the tallest kid in our class and the toughest kid loved beating him up . I also kicked his butt . Once everyone found out what had happened that little girl . She would not go anywhere unless she has some other Girls or Ron and I with her . After college i saw her at an art studio she smiled at Me and gave me a hug . My ex did not like that hug or her .

Maybe you will correct me.

As I read the earlier pages got the impression that the only thing that said she wa fucking other people was the ignorant bastard, Denny "s rant.

Any husband who assumes the works of an idiot are true,l becomes a fool,, so I found the ending did not fit the middle.

another fine Stang tale. 5 stars