All Comments on 'Oedipal Homecoming'

Pretty good story hope you write chapter 2 soon

Not a bad start but proofread. She mops around the house all day? It must be spotless...

You seem to mean 'dug'.

Don't try to edit your own work because you're fucking up the story.

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First, I have to agree, you need to learn about the words dig and dug. Dag does not exist. Second he's wearing a rubber when he comes inside her. Makes it kind of difficult for her to be pouring his cum back out of her pussy.

I have done it for years, starting during Christmas break my Sophomore year in college. I did things to her that my dad refused to do, and she craved them. He never figured it out and died six years later. I share the house with my mother, and she pleasures me like no other woman does. Incest is not a dirty word.

....ya erred with the ending (did Dad have to know?) - out of nowhere son starts beating on Dad. No sir!

And the condom thing? Very unsexy.

As I've said, could have been done & ended better.

This was an interesting storyline but you fouled it with the errors ... This must've been an early effort ~ didn't look at submission date ~ because grammatical errors abound here more than I have seen in any of your other stories.

I tried to read this story have tried it a couple of times and can't get past the first page. the son sounds like a complete prick plain and simple.

I didn't finish the story and here's why. You use dot dot dots and not commas. Then you go hog wild and start using Em dashes when not needed. Top it all off for some reason you blend two or more words as one. Load your story into a Text reader and try and enjoy it! Dot dot dots do NOT indicate a pause, it indicates that you read a few stories here at Literotica and decided to give it a try after picking up the bad habit! Em dashes do nothing for the story, just shows your confused mind. In Literary classes Or English Literature one of the first things you learn is, if you can use two words, do so. I was liking the story and all of the sudden I'm listening to dot dot dot dot dot dot. WTF? I was an Editor in Chief for 12 years and a Field Editor in Alaska while I lived in Fairbanks Alaska Editing for a National Hunting Magazine, my favorite job! If I had ever received a manuscript or story for Publication like this it went right in the dumpster. Look, I'm just trying to help and I've helped quite a few Authors here get out of that funk. Your writing skill help no one especially yourself!

Just an average story the start was a little weird not any info on the son and then their going to loose everything and son comes home and has sex with his mom and then a blowup with his father while drunk and then mother and son leave and then you stop!!!!!!!!!!!!!! You should have continued to see what happens 3 stars