All Comments on 'OFSTED Inspection'

I agree, it needs more work, but this is the first submission by this author and there's no reason to be critical.

I admit it got me horny but you need more detail, and make it longer

Dear author, this was about as erotic as watching paint dry.

Not much of a story. Few details. Just a wham bam.

I just think you could have some more detail in some places, but otherwise is a decent start.