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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 19 years ago
Need more conflict

Good fantacy for a man, but it doesn't ring true. You should add a little more conflict betweent the charters. Make the guy work for it a little more. The first time would not be that comfortable for her. She seems too experienced for a virgin and too eager.

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