by ywbyj
It seemed quite realistic, especially the description of their bodies. Her reluctance also seemed like a very realistic relationship dynamic.
One minor plot point - if they were sitting on opposite ends of the couch, they'd be too far apart for his cum to land on her. They'd have to be sitting next to each other. If you write a second chapter, perhaps have them sitting so their bodies were barely touching, so they could reach over and masturbate each other, or at least fantasize about it.
Oh, and double check your spelling of "masturbate".
Very easy read, very laid back. Certainly enjoyed it, look forward to the follow-up. Don't leave us hanging.
Great story, need more, see how this develops into a full on relationship, can see a blow job, leading to full sex....mmmm
married but curious, you missed the part where she requested he stand between her legs.
Story made me want to go down on her and only come up for occasional breath of air. Would make her come multiple times.
I liked how you made it ambiguous about whether she wanted him to cum on her face, or it was a happy accident. I'd like to read more about her planning how to get him to "accidentally" do things that turn her on - maybe switch POVs during a chapter, get into her head a bit, show her thoughts and feelings.
Well written. Good flow. Proper use of English. Just graphic enough. 5 stars.
Goofy Rob summed it up perfectly! You’re a good storyteller.
being 70 your story was just OMG thank you it made my day and us old guys just dont get many of those.
Mike L.
*****Now that's the way to spend lock down!! That old saying love the one you are with!! Damn good read Thanks for sharing.
Sounds like mom & I back in the day. When we were both younger. Need more chapters. Surely you can convince her to sleep with you. No need in both of you being lonely.
I can't tell how many young men have been seduced by my 42DD's and my thick bush.
Great start(I see that there are more chapters). It would be so hot to start a relationship that way.
Great story. I’m not sure I could control my emotions the way Erik did. I would have been trying to charm and seduce her.