All Comments on 'On The Beach'

Incest? Guess I missed it. Horrible childish dialogue. An experienced writer as you seem to be wrote this?

1 star

DragonRider55

Sorry about the dialogue. My next work will be truly Shakespearean. I submitted this as erotic couplings so blame the moderator for putting it in incest/taboo. Obviously there’s no incest in it.

A very sexy story and I am looking forward to reading more.

Maybe no incest, but could be taboo. Mom & daughter tag-teaming a guy...it fits.

I appreciate your efforts to use proper English. Unfortunately, I didn't care a lot for the story itself.It was just a bit...dry I think. Not horrible - just not terrific. I'll read your next story.

Appalling!

A nicely horny story but written with a weird, to British ears, superior tone. The situation is very sexy and maybe a rewrite with a more relaxed and respectful tone would be brilliant. Certainly not as bad as the litery police are making out. 😉

I loved this story even though it's a complete fabrication. He meets mother and daughter and within 5 minutes they're wanking him off? I like how the daughter keeps asking her mother if that's how Daddy does it. Couldn't they have arranged to meet at the beach again? I would like to read a sequel where the guy gets to actually fuck the woman's daughter.