All Comments on 'On the Edge'

A wonderful, heartfelt story. I loved the slow buildup, and their pain is real. Anyone whose experienced loss will see themselves in these two, and the hope that there could be more to live for.

A solid 5 stars.

that is very well written

I haven’t run across this author before. What a pleasant surprise. Great story: moving but not sentimental. Easy five stars.

There are suthors on this site for whom the queen's Englisg IS their first language, and they could not put forth anything resembling this! Please do not allow the fact that English is not your first (or perhaps even primary) language to minimize your accomplishment! I look forward to enjoying more of stories.

Beautifully written and so descriptive I felt as if I were there. As real as pain and suffering is, the healing you portray in this is more soothing. The human dynamics are complex and beautifully explored. It's a hopeful story and thus for a moment I can share in that hope. I'm sorry, but I can't find even a small flaw to include as helpful critique ;) As AMD said below; A solid 5 !

a lovely winter story; and a sweet ending after a loss on both of their past lives.

Extremely well written. The best part of the story is the last page. After all of the trials of both, you wrapped everything up perfectly to leave the reader with a real warm feeling. A solid 5*+ read. Thank you for sharing and hats off to excellent editing.

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A well written story.

Cheers

The slow build in the story allowed you to feel the despair of the characters. There was also the sense of community that comes from living in a small place where friendships are to had if you are open to them. Then there is the courage it takes to ultimately win out over suicide as an answer to one's pain-- observed by one character and not fully understood at the time by the other-- but then viewed without judgment. Then finally, the courage to lift yourself above the pain and move on to find and accept something better. Well done, very well done indeed.

Stunning

This story captures the tastes of grief and loneliness, perhaps too well. Beautifully written, taking us to despair, then guiding us back to contentment, if not happiness.

Very nice!

Wow. This came out of nowhere and smacked me right in the face. I’ll have to read your other work now - this was fabulous. Thanks for sharing it with us.

Excellent story!

5

Nice work. Thank you for taking it through the winter into a new spring-season.

Wow, an incredible story, thank you for sharing!

Very well written. I see that English is not your mother tongue, so even more congrats on writing a story in a different language. I would not even attempt to write in German, even though I speak it well.

Thank you, each and every one, for your votes and comments! I have been blown away by the amount of attention this story has had. I really, sincerely, appreciate it, especially comments. I give honorable mention to the one who sent me private feedback in Finnish - that takes some effort :-)

I thought this story might be too grim and gloomy, and I'm relieved to see so many of you didn't think so, or thought it was worth reading despite being so bleak.

Thank you for complimenting my English. For a few of my latest stories I have had help in editing, so the credit is not all mine. English is not my first language, and not even primary one, so whatever mistakes remain are all mine (and for more errors, see my earlier stories...). It's stupid to try and write prose in a foreign language, but there just aren't similar opportunities in Finnish, so I hope you bear with me.

Dude. This hit hard on my broken soul.

Crap... crying over a story on an erotica site. Best story on here.

Lovely. Loss and redemption. Five stars and a nudge for winning the contest.

Beautiful story, got me all weepy too!

I can't say this is the best story on Literotica, because I have not read them all. But it is the best that I have read. It's even more astounding when I think that English is not your native language. Fabulous work! Makes me wish I could give more than 5 stars. Well done Omenainen! Well done!

Cannot believe English is not your first language as this is so well written. The characters are so realistic and their pain and grief so striking that it seemed there would not be a happy outcome. The epilogue is extremely gratifying.

Such a lovely, somber tale, and so beautiful. Some people complain about stories long sections of narrative and dialogue, but it worked for Dickens and many other great writers, and it worked well here for you, too. Excellent work. 5*

this is an amazing story, I lost somebody to cancer so I kind of know what he went through (wasnt my wife though), along wit that the writing is fantastic.

I have witnessed cancer in family and friends. I was in a car wreck that could have easily ended my life. well written story that was filled with grief and hope. thank you

Wow. There are a few authors on this site that can really really write a damn good story and you are one of them. Really touching tale of two lost souls. Excellent.

Brilliant the way you evoked such a deep and moody atmosphere surrounding both of them, then led them into the light.

Tragedy is part of our lifetime and we should be thankful for the days the sunlight warms our skin ….. being in the here and now give us the possibilities to enjoy the most precious moments, especially with kids or soulmates around ….. this tale offered this wisdom in a fine special artistic script …. Thank you🌹🍀

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