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Cannot wait for more

Looking forward to the new chapters.

I cannot wait for more! I’d never seen your stories before, but I’ve read two others already. You’re an automatic favorite author.

Awesome story

Loved the buildup, great anticipation...even knowing where it was headed!! Looking forward to the next chapter(s).

Thank you. More is needed.

Kate wants to watch.

Patiently {HA!} awaiting Chapter 2.

5 * !

Thanks so much, everyone! This story was agony to write and I was certain it was going to tank (see my blog, linked in my profile, for the backstory). Amazing to see it being so well received.

As a retired teacher, when reading, any errors pop out at me and often ruin any possibility of completely enjoying the story. Here, enjoyment abounds. Halfway way through I realized that nothing had popped up to my over-critical eye, I relaxed and enjoyed it all the more.

I almost did not want it to end I love it completely even knowing where it was going but it was perfect. I can hardly wait for chapter 2 with the wife watching it could get interesting. How much does Amy know about sex and how far will she go to please both parties.

....but is Amy on birth control?

Great story, but I worry.

Heh. I try not to make my stories THAT predicable :-) Besides, Amy would never do that to him, though of course he should have asked. However, once she settles in with Ben and Kate, the question may come up.

Jealous of your writting, jealous of Ben. Thanks for sharing.

Wow Frankenstein1962. Dunno what to say to that except thank you. I cringe reading my own writing. And Ben may find balancing life with a horny teenager and his wife gets tricky.

Beautifully written, can't wait for chapter two.

Wish I could have rated it higher than a 5!

Thanks so much, Cagonzon! I worked waaay to hard on this one. Glad (and very surprised) see it so well received. And anonymous 1 and 2: thanks too. Everyone's great response to this story has motivated me to speed things up and I'm nearly done Chapter 2.

Ditch the wife. Amy pregnant? Nice betrayal.GX

Great story, and very well written. I really LIKE the characters and the relationships. Could the young lady provide a spark to restart a seemingly cold engine?

Was hoping Katherine would say ‘She’s sucking your dick right now isn’t she?’

Great story...great build, leading to passionate taboo sex. Cannot wait to read how Kate plays into this later. Again, I really enjoyed this story😉

Thanks for sharing!

When I started reading this story I figured it would be just like all the other ones. Surprise, finding out that Kate is agreeable and willing to go along just added a whole different dimension to the story. Maybe Kate would like a little woman on woman to bring back her spark. Guess I'll have to read the next chapter to find out. Thanks and five stars.

And have my husband be the one watching me while I get what I need...

The last line was the best. It almost made me cum

I really enjoyed this..

Earlier in the story Kate said, “whatever you do.. Don’t fall in love.” Because your heart belongs to me.” Would have been great literary tool to have her say it again knowing that he was with Amy but giving him her blessing, all while confirming her love for him. I know it flows better into the next story with your line the way it is. Otherwise, a great story. The tease, his buildup to and ultimate fall into her (literal) clutches was well-paced and very sexy. Looking forward to 2“Whatever you do... don’t fall in love. Because your heart belongs to me.”

Funny you mention that, lexluthr. That line was planted for exactly that purpose. In an earlier draft the story concludes with Ben getting permission to fuck Amy but still being wracked with guilt since he realizes (and can't admit to Kate) he's falling in love with Amy... the ultimate betrayal. But it didn't work- too cheesy and too sudden. I've woven him falling in love with her and Kate starting to accept it into the later chapters.

This has got to be one of the best I've read on here.

Super pace and imagery.

Keep up the good work.

A very enjoyable well written story. And what every man with a menopausal wife dreams of. You nailed it!

Wonderful!

Good premise.

Well written. Well paced. Great buildup.

Until the sex. Much too fast. Lacks foreplay. She kissed him on the neck earlier. Why not in a scene/situation, but taking the kissing further? Why no step-by-step progression? If he was leery about putting his hands on her breasts, for example, why couldn't she have done it fore him? And tell him how she liked them played with? Harder? Softer? Squeezing? Caressing? What kind of nipple play? Did she want her nipples sucked? How did she tell him? Directions while he was sucking?

Continuing in that manner. Step by step.

Four stars.

Only fair; because we want to watch Too !

Watch? Of course Kate does!

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Great story, awesome characters, I don't know how you did it, but getting the last page break, right there, ir sheer brilliance! I have zero doubt that every single reader turned that page expecting Kate to say "but don't fall in love". I knew it like I know my own name.

And then you got me.

I haven't been got like that in a really, really long time. Thanks.

It's way late. I need to sleep. Fuck it. I'm calling in sick. Gotta read ch 2.

Oh, and Anonymous, Good premise...blah blah blah. If you want to publicly critique, fine. But at least sign your fucking name to it. It's his story. Let him tell it.

Heh. Thanks, ZekeNoScooter_8. The final page break was a complete accident. Guess it does help the slightly surprising conclusion, though. Very happy to hear it "got you." Look forward to your comments on Chapter 2.

Great story! It described exactly why Amy would fall in love with Ben. And how Ben fought the temptation to the end. The ending is any man's dream. What a man would not want a mistress with his wife's approval!

I agree with the other commentators, an excellent, well plotted, and well-written love story with an interesting twist.

Great story

Fantastic story. I have to say, I came here after reading on the forum about the fortuitous page break... It was worth the read for that alone. But worth the read for the story, too.

Thanks!

Well thanks, Publius68 (and everyone else who's commented). So glad you liked the story. I think you're the first to have found one of my stories through the Author's Hangout. And I didn't even notice where the page break fell until it was pointed out.

Perhaps because I have gotten old, and once found my self in a similar situation, and imagined it was me, but that was the hottest story I have ever read here. I hope the next two are half as stimulating. Of course in my situation, since I was always into older women it would not have been a nineteen year old. LOL! Perhaps a thirty-five... Perhaps I should plagiarize the idea and write that one... :-)

Loved the story, but didn't like the fact that he was trying to cover up having sex with Amy. At least showing a bit of conflict in his mind would have been nice, about lying to his loving, very understanding wife, even him making excuses to himself of telling her later in person would have been fine. Straight up trying to lie and cover it up tainted this otherwise beautiful story, but still 5-star worthy.

You are an amazing writer!

Finally found this story and you are a great writer!! Saving that amazing line for a 4th page to put all emphasis on it was genius and hot!! Great work!

Great build up. Looking forward to reading the next part!

Man, you are good at this. Good stuff.