All Comments on 'One End of the Spectrum'

This is my first story submission to Literotica, though I've read stories here on and off for years. I really appreciate any comments, feedback or constructive criticism anyone has. I hope that you enjoyed it, and I'd like to know how to make my stories better.

Thanks

Belle

You managed a good entry into the story. It was easy to get a feel for the characters and i really liked the authenticity of them. The combination of raw desire without abandoning an emotional sweetness was nice.

Well done and go on writing!

Great start. Keep writing.

" He wondered who he might turn into if he stayed with her."

This was and sometimes still is the hardest part for me. How not to loose yourself to the dark side? How to keep the ability to stop when the sub had enough?

I too noticed the line: "He wondered who he might turn into if he stayed with her."

She didn't get lost in this one, Belle, and I think it's because she was chasing what she wanted, which isn't the same as what he wanted (or was able) to give. The ebb and flow of the power dynamic made sense to me. I'm not sure I'll ever get the desire for pain, but seeing how she gets there is fascinating.

What a wonderful story.

Wow. That was an addictive read. So powerful , erotic combined with the need for total release from the endorphins running rampant through both of them. This is definitely worth a second reading.