by Alex756
An excellent vision culminated by the seasoning of passionate romance. Stellar job!
If you won't write a sequel to this magnificent story, someone else likely will. Such greatness begs it! Rate it >100+!
I loved the story itself, it was a very thrilling heart warming thing to read. I do need you to know that your spelling needs some work though, slid and slide are not the same thing, nor are lead and led. As a grammatical mistake it took a little from the ease of reading, but I only saw about 3 or 4 mistakes. Good writing!
If you are going to be an outstanding writter you must learn to improve your grammer. Good story and 10 years less difference in their age would have made it better. I believe you could made their ages closer together and given them a real future. It would make Ch2 more believable. I hope there is a Ch2. All in all good job. you painted a very good picture of her.
A simple, yet wonderful story. It somewhat reminds me of myself and how I met my much younger wife.