All Comments on 'One-Sie Morning of Passion'

You've started a good short story here, but you need to finish not just their initial copulation, but what comes after. I'd suggest having them go climbing, have each other again on the mountain or in a convenient copse of trees, then return to camp and spend the evening in a boinkfest in her tent. After that, depending on what the characters tell you, you can end the story or set it up open-ended for further adventures with the two.

Unlike his dick, this was too short! lol