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by U4ea

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sacksackover 19 years ago
and now a sequel please.....

You wouldn't want to be a grinch and deny everyone the hot sex!!

sacksackover 19 years ago
and now a sequel please.....

You wouldn't want to be a grinch and deny everyone the hot sex!!

AnonymousAnonymousover 19 years ago
Needs Editing

Take this as constructive feedback and get your work edited before you submit it. The changes in tense and the typing errors didn't do you any favors.

cookiejarcookiejarover 19 years ago
U4ea...

I saw your post on the AH and took it into consideration on the tense changes. A hot little tale by the way. Good luck!

Rumple ForeskinRumple Foreskinover 19 years ago
Hot steaming online sex

That was a fun read. Too bad about the tense screw-up. It'll probably cost you a few votes but the story is still a good one.

Rumple

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