by U4ea
You wouldn't want to be a grinch and deny everyone the hot sex!!
You wouldn't want to be a grinch and deny everyone the hot sex!!
Take this as constructive feedback and get your work edited before you submit it. The changes in tense and the typing errors didn't do you any favors.
I saw your post on the AH and took it into consideration on the tense changes. A hot little tale by the way. Good luck!
That was a fun read. Too bad about the tense screw-up. It'll probably cost you a few votes but the story is still a good one.
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