All Comments on 'Oozing Love on Mel's head'

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This has to be one of the very worst "stories" ever to soil the Lit pages!

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I knew we were in trouble when 'VJ' lived just around the corner, yet it took the siblings <i>"a brisk 40 minute walk"</i> to get there - yet still I read on. Stupid me!

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It would be pointless to detail the rest of what's wrong with this stinker, because you've just read it yourself and now you know too...

I've read all of your stories and with the exception of your busty jessica stories loved everyone! Keep writing more! Please!

I liked the story. I thought it was sweet. Wish it had been longer. Maybe you will continue for us.

but I liked the title.

Thats probably the worst story i've ever read on here. no build up, no reason for buildup, no real characterization, lame plot line if you even call it one. oh and what the hell is this 'vj'? Was that his name, his title or was he a video jockey? All i got was he was a photograher that took explicit photos of her. Again with out the proper characterization we have no idea why this character was even introduced and is essential to the story? The whole plot is guy discovers diary and sisters secret with hair, then they meet this 'VJ' and they have a photo shoot and they have a blow job fest. End of story. There was a reason we took writing as part of our high school curriculum it was to avoid reading shit stories like this. let me explain writing, the object is create a picture giving as much detail as possible with out being too wordy essentially giving the reader the sense of looking in to the lives of the characters.

I thought it was a sweet story. All of the "anonymouses" are so brave, aren't they? Too funny... I like your stories Seth. *kisses*

Oops, read it when it first came out and thought I commented, but apparently I was wrong :) Fast paced, down and dirty story - nicely done!

i want my time back this was a total waste of space if you are writting for yourself then don't post it if you are writting for the readers make sure you do a good job and do it properly you must be a 10 year old

i see another lousey writer bribing fellow writer into giving rave reviews seems the only way these writers can get good ratings.

Great story Sethp! Don't listen to those other jerks. They're just jealous because nobody reads their stories! lol You are amazing! I can't wait for your next story!

I love it when a brother and sister get along so well. Especially when a sister treats her big brother's big stiff cock with such loving care and devotion. It's so sweet when sis uses her little pink tongue and her warm tender mouth on her big brother's cock till he blows his brotherly balls down her throat. I notice that the hero of this tale has the same name as the gifted author. Hmm. Maybe setp's got a cute little sister who's real devoted to his fine fat prick. A sister's mouth makes a great receptacle for her brother's creamy sperm. Also a sister's twat.

it s fucking shit........

the people that like it are shit head and don t care who they are,sick in there head.