by spider007
I know it's only fantasy but this is just fucking garbage from every angle. Poorly constructed rambling mess.
some woman treat you badly or more likely none would have any thing to do with your sick ass!
How much nastier can it get. Your vicious streak shows through.
All your stories are depraved and devoid of real feelings.
Hopefully you are not around any children.-5!
The fantasies and the supposed morality that are portrayed in these little offerings are of no concern to me. For me it is all about the writing.
Unfortunately the writing in this one leaves ... almost everything to be desired.
I only read part of page one. Couldn't see it getting any better. Hopefully, someday you will find somebody to love.
Not only is this the wrong category, it sucked. Seriously, what the fuck is wrong with you? Do you get off on hitting women hard enough to make bruises show? And then to include the 16 year old daughter?
To make this story better, let me suggest a baseball bat. Every time you get the urge to write, hit yourself in the head until the urge goes away. Repeat as necessary. Maybe you'll knock some sense into your thick skull or discover that you have no brains. Either way, it's win win.
Thats for sure. 1* Just plain sick. Not erotioc at all. Twisted
Wow. This is really an abusive story and the poor woman is going along with it?
BDSM and Incest along with group sex and with threats of interracial forced sex, all rolled up in one story. He must really hate his wife.
I'm wondering how this story will end.