by aa822005
This was a great story. I would appreciate the use of proper English punctuation, however... but the material is really hot and filled with true lust.
Reading at such stories makes me wish I was a woman :) Congratulations and keep the good work!
But they sure help out readers!
But generally a good story. Seems a little rushed - like maybe they shouldn't've hooked up until the next show.
An otherwise very good story was ruined by lack of quotation marks.
Basic english writing 101, people!
I thought that was so hot and i hope you will write more of Jess and Adrianne there so Sexy together keep up the great writing.
Thanks
Pat.
Atlanta,Ga.
Very nicely written - pace is kept up; eroticism is hot. Look forward to the opening night!