All Comments on 'Operation: Final Fantasy Ch. 04'

Please oh please oh please don't end it like that. Maybe he had blanks in the gun, misfired although it still sounded like a shot or at the last second he aimed away. But oh well if ya dont it was still a great story. can't wait to read more from you.

Well, my buddy random_librarian talked me into at least sending out a message letting you guys know there will be another part to this story instead of having everyone think the story is over, but the problem is I won't be able to post it for a few weeks or so, so please bear with me. No spoilers, but I have one or two more submissions for O:FF. Looks like I may have lost a lot of readers by this point judging by the number of favorites and the lower score! Of coure that's to be expected with an ending like this so I have no one to blame but myself :) Still, I hope you have liked the journey so far of Ryan and Tr..., um, I mean, Ryan and Jessica. Don't hesitate to leave comments!

-Spartan

And I will patiently wait for the next chapter. Good story ... Sometimes love is not all smiles and sex.

i don't know how this is going to end, but i'll wait and see. this part was a downer. i hope it gets better when you resume . i'd give this a minus five if i could. thanks...

I have a hard time finding fault with his thinking. It takes a lot of courage to blindly leap.

I could see this happening like being played on the movie screen, the hurt, pain, jesssica's fear, insistence, you are doing a good job painting their characters, when he pushed her too the ground it was like slow motion, could so see it in my head. I disagree this is not a downer but a natural step in the direction for the story and where Ryan was heading and what it means for Jessica to be there, understand hima and hopefully intervene. I don't have a clue where the next story angle could go, stray bullet, or ryan gets it...............happy to leave it to you

Excellent writing.

I'm on the edge of my seat.

I know it's a story, but she should have told him she loved him and her life was to be with him-and their kids... She really wasn't a call girl, and wanted to be his wife and mother to their children...