All Comments on 'Other World Kingdom'

I can only assume English is not your first language, that said it was hard reading with so many grammatical errors along with incorrect word and phrase choices, I nearly gave up on several occasions, the back story starts out well enough, but then becomes full of repetition towards the last few pages. Reasonable first attempt should you write further, maybe an editor would be advantageous, they could also advise on proof reading and condensing. I usually like to give a glowing comment and five stars but on this occasion it's not the case.

It starts about the OWK and morphs into a drug crazed gang story. In which I have no interest in reading waste of time. The queens name was Sylvia not Madeline. IT closed because of its harsh reputation kept men away! Even men were not dumb enough to seek out be beaten to near death.