by Paul_at
But every tie there's sex, it's boom -- zero to sixty in a nanosecond. Is she going to give him a handjob? Boom -- on cock and jerking immediately. Is he going to eat her pussy? Mouth on pussy with no delay at all.
The dialog is OK. But it could be better if she'd ask him what he liked about each girl on the porn CD. There could be discussion about whether he liked her body, her face, her lips, her breasts, her nipples, her handjob technique, and so on. Did he like it faster? Slower? Harder? Softer? Did he like it when the girl in the porn slowed down her cock teasing to make the guy's cumming be delayed?
I gave it four stars.
This was really well written incredibly erotic and cum inducing.
This is one to read over and over to get all the details great work
Just happened upon this. Glad I did, pretty hot and detailed. The dialog was believable which is rare in most erotic stories
I was hoping that they had each been with other partners in the booths.
Great story.
That is the hottest story I have read here for many years. Thank you for sharing and please post some more. Just super.
It was a great story with great descriptions of cumming. But not enough mentions of the woman being his stepmom. He should call her "Mom" a lot, and scream for his Mommy as he blasts into her open mouth, and she could say that he's a good boy. Also, the waitress could have been excited and gotten under the table to lick stepmom and then suck sonny-boy. A mother-son couple having sex with a strange girl--in public....hot!
6 pages of same-o same-o does get a bit boring. Now if the waitress the night they went out to dinner turned out to be a former H.S. classmate who'd been too shy to show her interest in Our Hero back then and she copped to what the two of them were doing, and they knew she knew and she knew they knew so they, after chatting a bit with her, invited her over after her night shift was done . . . Long sentence, but you get the idea.
this story sucked.. who gives a shit about what kind of porn he likes/has,,, tht is soo fucking irrelevant,, learn how to tell a story!!
The story was very good but..you need to fuck her more. Make sure you fuck her ass too.
this story has so many ways to go. Be sure to add other women and make her seduce them.
I loved this story!
I hope you return to writing soon!
Thanks for sharing.
This woman is every mans dream. And some of us are lucky enough to have been with one. I count myself as one of the few. You have to keep writing. awsome job.
Sorry, but this is justa long-winded rambling of how addicted to porn ya are... there's more character development needed.
havnt even read it all yet but have say this on page 2
"Don't you dare close your eyes. Even when you cum."
that seem cruel....god i go crazy if held off that long and then still had force eye be open....lol
I loved it and i am slowly becomeing a porn addict myself but being female it is werid i love the story and would love to hear more of you and jennifer experiences i especially love how you go into such detail its perfect
A few years ago, I would tell you there was no such person that exists; however now i know different. This story brought back some lustful memories a time well spent with a slut well remembered.
Your girl said, "no other men, " I bet she likes the scent of a woman.
Thanks for a great story!
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I heard a guy tell me once that he would NEVER lick a pussy. I told him to give me ONE night with his wife and she would be MINE! And he was the one with a really big dick too! Stupid fuck. And I wouldn't give you a brass farthing for a women that wouldn't respond in kind. Great story. Wanking ain't my style, but this one was definitely pud pulling paradise.
BEST. STORY. EVER.
well-written, and especially appealing to my personal
fetishes.
Your story was one of the best I've read... but went into a bit too much detail in descibing all the types of porn that paul has on his computer. Still. Great work.
Absolutely loved it. Really well written and very hot indeed. Perhaps a little slow at times, but that wasn't enough to take away from how good the story was. Keep it up!
All but the gay guy gave this a 100% rating. We're waiting for your next chapter
you have the potential with this girl of living out a myriad of fantasies. would love to read more of your work.
Didn't Jennifer promise Paulie that she would have anal sex with him? Be sure to include that in your next story and a little rimming wouldn't hurt either.
Paul, every part of this story kept my pussy drenched with my own sweet juices. Loved it!
Dont let anyone tell you that it was too long, i loved it long, interesting and very good keep it up
Very hot, don't let the submission of to long stop you. The length makes it all the hotter.
I like the additional build up and descriptions. The details on the porn stars was a bit much, but certainly reinforced his thoughts and desires.