All Comments on 'Out for Revenge'

Two paragraphs and I’m done. Your sentence structure is woefull. Also certain phrases are just ingrained in people. The phrase is hunters now became the hunted, you can’t flip it to hunted now became the hunters. People read that and come to a screeching halt as they have an expectation soon as they read the first word they know what you meant to say.

Allot of your sentences are stand alone items, like your making a list. 1 I’ll go here. 2 I’ll do that. Removing the numbers and joining them end to end does not make a paragraph.

A paragraph is a group of sentences that are linked by a topic or thread that lead on to each other as read. The first sentence commonly has links to the last paragraph and the last sentence leads on to the next paragraph.