by StephanieR
Hello StephanieR,
I read your story very carefully and enjoyed every moment.
You have a great talent with imagery, I was able to picture the places and the people quite effortlessly.
Well done and thanks for the story.
cheers
Anon from Sydney
Hi. Loved the story and the overall execution, but Stephanie's description of the love making and her emotional reaction to it was very dry, like reciting an accounting ledger. Their flat emotional arcs detract from the story because the reader is left with the feeling they saw a pleasant Timeshare presentation rather than experiencing life-changing communions with the elementary spirits of the earth. If you could add that element, your story would be outstanding.
Very interesting. Most Americans won't know that gum leaves are from Eucalyptus trees. Cowboy100
An adventure into the spirits land - pretty interesting and well told.