All Comments on 'Over Fifty Housing - Carole'

Another gentle, sensual story with understated characterization. I especially enjoyed Doris' attention to her change in vocabulary at the beginning of the story. I can relate.

Brava!

Oh lovely o to be a. Fly on the wall or better abed bug or just invisible

Enjoyable in loving sensitive sexual way.

Nicely done - with some exceptions - any of which could be corrected by finding an editor with whom you would be comfortable.

I'm certain she or he would begin with calling your attention to your many tense shifts, and then helping you see the value in doing your own repeated proof-reads before submitting, either for edit or publication.

Then you may wish to work on your pacing. This was a story that did not want to be rushed, but I'm afraid that it was, after all, which served to go counter to its theme. While the meal was tasty, it just wasn't quite delicious.

Sophisticated erotica is like a fine gemstone; once the cut is made, it's all about the polish.

Do keep on writing. You have a talent for it.

Very well done, Robin!

I think this is one of your best.

Nice character development and very arousing erotic descriptions, particularly as you undress each other and discover each other’s beautiful sensuality.

Yes, you aroused me!